When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why?
Schools should be provide proper funding from the government and parents consider it utmost important that their ward's school fee be paid within the deadline. In failing to do so, would cause severe problems to the proper functioning of the school and in the worst plausible scenario, teachers of specific subjects would be laid off. Although, sports and arts are equally important extra-curricular activities, in dire situations one must be sacrificed. Rationally speaking, the faculty of arts and music should be laid off respectfully.
Firstly, arts and music depend on whiteboards and instruments respectively. No doubt, mentors are needed to guide the children and hone their skills. However, as drastic situations causing the school to cancel these classes, would not affect as much as it would have if sport sessions were cancelled. The primary reason being that instruments and art materials are domestic objects, to which the students can easily practice at their own homes. But sports require a gymnasium and generally, a more wider playground than the gardens seen at home. To illustrate, consider an athelete who is preparing for the national 100 meter race. To practice he or she would require a 100 meter strip of a clean and straight lane. Additionally, other students who are about to compete in the same are required to race together. This provides a benchmark for each student as to how they are performing and it cannot be done without the proper conducive environment.
Secondly, tutors of arts and music are available even after school. They sometimes also visit the student's home as private tutors and there is almost no distinction in the quality of training than they would have recived at school. Unfortunately, this level of flexibility is not available in physical education classes. Obviously, a teacher cannot provide basketball lessons in the backyard of a student's home which would just be ridiculuous! Furthermore, the essence of sports lies in teamwork, which would require every student to be available at a common location, thus private sport tutoring is not feasible.
All in all, I would conclude that sport lessons cannot be compromised whereas subjects such as music and art, can be adjusted to private tutoring mode. In essence, you would actually not be sacrificing any course, since the students would be able to obtain a similar training outside the school environment. And in doing so, sport lessons at school can be continued without any obstructions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, whereas, as to, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 7.85571142285 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 404.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19306930693 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85797099976 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544554455446 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8795479934 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.9 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225547042817 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07167298534 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540901422209 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152823962302 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060389251329 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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