The charts below show each grade level’s activity and the total revenue gained from it, by percentage, from King Primary School’s recent fundraising event.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture in question is a pie-chart that shows the break-up of total revenue gained from each grade level’s activity, by percentage from King Primary School’s recent fundraising event. The table above the pie chart details the list of fund-raising activities and the order in which thay are graded.
As per the information , it is evident that the maximum revenue is generated by the 1st grade activity -the dance contest that occupies a massive 23.7% of the total money raised. The second fund encashing event of the fundraiser is obviously the cake decorating contest, ranked as 2nd among activities. It takes up 20.9% of the total funds . Coming in the third place in terms of generating cash is the Cookie sale. It covers 18.3% of the revenue and is ranked as grade 5 activity. Next coming in the list is the soccer skill contest. It bagged 15.5% of the total funds raised , which is listed as grade 6 . In terms of revenue collection, next in line is the art sale that raked up 13.9% of the money., while being listed as 4th grade. The last to come in with a ranking of 3rd and 7.8% of the net money collected is the book sale.
So from this pie chart , we receove ample information about the types of events that were organised as a part of the fund-raiser and how did each one of them contribute to the revenue, some more , some less.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, second, so, third, while, in the third place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1107.0 965.302439024 115% => OK
No of words: 242.0 196.424390244 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57438016529 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94415379849 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4698461143 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 106.607317073 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578512396694 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 336.6 283.868780488 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7651141541 43.030603864 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.25 112.824112599 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08333333333 5.23603664747 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.09268292683 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284673268938 0.215688989381 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0924114401094 0.103423049105 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135670862029 0.0843802449381 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213863841844 0.15604864568 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144235071651 0.0819641961636 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.2329268293 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 11.4140731707 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 40.7170731707 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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