Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
In this argment, the arguer declare that the Plainsvilles schoolchildren will tend to join their program called Fitness for Life, which bloster regular exercise at an early age. To justify the anticipation, the arguer points out an example involving the sales of running shoes, exercise equipment and the popularity of the local health club. With a series of unwarranted and poor evidences and holes, however, the argument fails to be convincing as it stands.
First of all, it is unreasonable that the arguer suppose that the sales of exercise equipment equal to the popularity of excercise among the citizens living in Plainsville. More people prefer to running or jogging, which contributes to increasing sales on running shoes. However, we cannot assert that such phenomenon was caused because many people love running. In reality, if store in this area only sale running shoes without other types of shoes, the people are accustomed to wear running shoes rather than other types. Therefore, if the arguer should provide more credible data about the sales of running shoes among all types of shoes, the proposed argument would be significantly strengthened.
Furthermore, it is unfair to assume that many people in Plainsville will tend to join the exercise in the future, since the local health club almost closed during five years. On the contrary, the business status of the local health club infer that only few people prefer to regular sport in this area. If the arguer ignore the above facts, the negative effects will influence the profit of his stores.
Additionally, even if the aforementioned assumptions are accepted, the arugment merely relies on the assumption that the need of the children exercise cannot be supported by convincing and plausible evidence. In fact, we cannot obtain the relationship between the participation of adults and adolescents now. Thereby, hastily carrying out such recommendation of openning new store in Plainsville would lead to unprodicted negative effects.
Overall, the arger should provide more incredible information about the data from the local exercise among different people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 195, Rule ID: PREFER_TO_VBG[1]
Message: Did you mean 'run'?
Suggestion: run
...g in Plainsville. More people prefer to running or jogging, which contributes to increa...
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Line 2, column 466, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[4]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'accustomed to wearing'.
Suggestion: accustomed to wearing
...ut other types of shoes, the people are accustomed to wear running shoes rather than other types. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, in fact, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1799.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 337.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33827893175 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8182632201 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543026706231 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6648597673 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 119.933333333 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4666666667 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46666666667 5.21951772744 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0274285943926 0.243740707755 11% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00935804687953 0.0831039109588 11% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0121466537069 0.0758088955206 16% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0156201963282 0.150359130593 10% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00886997496951 0.0667264976115 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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