Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Human activities have major influence on the extinction the many species. Activities like hunting, deforestration for building homes, highways, industries, etc. have caused many species to become endangered or even extinct. The prompt claims that society should only be concerned in saving the species that have became endangered because of human activities. I mostly disagree with this argument for two main reasons, which i will elucidate below. However, as it stands today, protecting this endangered species comes bearing a cost.
To begin, it cannot be stated with certainty that humans have absolutely no role in making the species extinct. Humans activities severely affect the environment and thus indirectly affecting the natural habital of these species. Water contamination, climate change, air pollution have significant contribution in destroying the ecology and thus indirectly affecting this species. Many species are significantly reduced in number and when such species faces natural clamities, it becomes difficult for them to recover from it. Extinction of even one species from the food chain that was due to human activity can severely damage the food chain. Thus, even indirectly humans have influence on the extinction and endangering of the species.
Secondly, humans considered themself to be the smartest and intellectual of all the other species. This make the human morally responsible for protecting the mother nature and as well as the animals surving in it. Humans activities have resulted in the extinction of many species in the past. Many animals are hunted till this date to obtain certain elements from them and many of which are killed just for display purpose. Like for examples, elephants are hunted for the husk and rhinos are hunted for their horns. Therefore, it is the responsibility the humans to protect such species. . In some way the other each animal have played some role in maintaining the ecology. Thus it is in mutual benefit of the humans to protect other species as well. Also turning a blind eye for other species raises a question on the human moral. Hence, humans should take efforts in protecting all the species.
However, protecting these species comes with a cost which the human societies need to bear together. These endangered species needs special attention like protection for natural clamities and other predators. Building establishment for these species involves cost to the government. However, such cost can be mitigated with appropriate strategies. Like building zoo and wild santuary attracts tourists. Country like China have created a monopoly on pandas across the world. Even if this is an debatable argument, one cannot disagree that this has prevented pandas from going extinct.
In conclusion, as a part of this one nature it is responsiblity of the humans show care for all the species. As this species have helped in some manner maintaining the homeostatis in nature that humans benefit from the most.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...ncerned in saving the species that have became endangered because of human activities....
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...is argument for two main reasons, which i will elucidate below. However, as it st...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ity the humans to protect such species. . In some way the other each animal have ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...d some role in maintaining the ecology. Thus it is in mutual benefit of the humans t...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...umans to protect other species as well. Also turning a blind eye for other species r...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...andas across the world. Even if this is an debatable argument, one cannot disagree...
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Line 9, column 110, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e humans show care for all the species. As this species have helped in some manner...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2524.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 472.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34745762712 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76376749309 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468220338983 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 792.9 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.710561763 60.3974514979 41% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.4193548387 118.986275619 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2258064516 23.4991977007 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.67741935484 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252093407809 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808351560644 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569534246165 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158118415679 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055709681954 0.0667264976115 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.8420337079 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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