With the advent of technologies in the last two centuries, human life and society has taken a drastic change in the matter of luxuries and conveniences. Just like each coin has two faces, these facilities also have their own merits and demerits. The prompt claims that these facilities do not let people become strong, independent individuals. Well, I mostly agree with the above argument for two main reasons, which I will elucidate below. However, I do concede that one cannot overlook the benefits of these luxuries and conveniences.
To begin, the technology has become so commonplace that human life has become heavily dependent on it. All generations of people, from children in school to adults in offices, are in some manner hooked to the machine all day long. Social media has become an intricate part of life. In the last few years, ever since the pandemic started, the entire population has been heavily dependent on mobile phones, computers, and television. This has created a lot of negative effects on people, such as sleep deprivation, anxiety, etc. As much as the phones have connected people over the world in these tough times, it has also reduced the connection with ones family. Thus, it is fair to conclude that although these conveniences of technology have brought the world closer, they also have negative effects on people's lives.
Secondly, people are being negatively influenced and affected by the luxuries of technology. Studies show that there is an increase in the number of people battling heart diseases, obesity, diabetes, etc. All of the above diseases are the result of the contemporary lifestyle, which has made people lazy and rely on technology. Teenagers, who should be invested in studies and sports, are wasting their precious time on ludicrist things like social media. Ample studies highlight the negative effects social media has on people's lives. Thus, one can say that the luxuries of contemporary life are preventing people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Lastly, however, one cannot overlook the merits these technologies has provided. It depends on the individual's will to take advantage of this beneficial side of the technology. The entire knowlegde of the human summed is available on palm of the hands. The distances between the places have "reduced" with the availability of affordable and convenient transportation. Hence, we can say that these luxuries and conveniences have a beneficial side as well.
In conclusion, we can say that although the luxuries and convienences have a deletorius affect on many individuals, it high depends on the individual to turn this affect around to ones benefit.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
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Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
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Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
... depends on the individual to turn this affect around to ones benefit.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, thus, well, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2275.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 433.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25404157044 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90956594363 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5103926097 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 729.9 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.4320254235 60.3974514979 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.7916666667 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0416666667 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184837903284 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05083609568 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671617765156 0.0758088955206 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0960992024387 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597709099322 0.0667264976115 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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