The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
With the advent of technologies in the last two centuries, human life and society has taken a drastic change in the matter of luxuries and conveniences. Just like each coin has two faces, these facilities also have their own merits and demerits. The prompt claims that these facilities does not let people to become a strong and independent individuals. Well, I mostly agree with the above argument for two main reasons, which I will elucidate below. However, I do concede that one cannot overlook the benefits of these luxuries and conveniences.
To begin, the technology has become such a commonplace thing that human life have become strongy dependent on it. All generations of people from children in school to adults in offices are in some manner hooked to the machine all day long. Social media has become a intricate part of life. In the last few years ever since the pandemic started, entire population has been heavily dependent of mobile phones, computers and television. This has created a lots of negative effects on people such as sleep deprivation, anxiety, etc. As much as the phones have connected people over the world in these tough times, it has also reduced the connection with ones family. Thus, it is fair to conclude that althought these convienences of technology has brought the world closer, it also have negative effects on the peoples lives.
Secondly, people are gettting negatively influenced and affected by the luxuries of technologies. Studies shows the that there is an increase in the number of people battling with heart diseases, obesity, diabities, etc. All of the above diseases are result of the comtemporary lifestyle which has made people lazy and rely of technology. Teenagers who should be invested in studies and sports are wasting their precious time of ludicrist things like social media. Ample of studies highlight the ill affects social media have on peoples life. Thus, one can say that luxuries of the contemporary life is preventing people from developing into truly strong and independeny individuals.
Lastly, however, one cannot overlook the merits these technologies has provided. It depends on the individual's will to take advantage of this beneficial side of the technology. The entire knowlegde of the human summed is available on palm of the hands. The distances between the places have "reduce" with the availability of afordable and convient transportations. Hence, we can say that these luxuries and conveniences have a beneficial side as well.
In conclusion, we can say that although the luxuries and convienences have a deletorius affect on many individuals, it high depends on the individual to turn this affect around to ones benefit.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 265, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e all day long. Social media has become a intricate part of life. In the last few...
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Line 3, column 452, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
...puters and television. This has created a lots of negative effects on people such as s...
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Line 3, column 651, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...it has also reduced the connection with ones family. Thus, it is fair to conclude th...
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Line 3, column 779, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...y has brought the world closer, it also have negative effects on the peoples lives. ...
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Line 5, column 222, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
...eart diseases, obesity, diabities, etc. All of the above diseases are result of the comtem...
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Line 9, column 89, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...ries and convienences have a deletorius affect on many individuals, it high depends on th...
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Line 9, column 164, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
... depends on the individual to turn this affect around to ones benefit.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, thus, well, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2285.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 440.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19318181818 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89912978537 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513636363636 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 732.6 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0098270714 60.3974514979 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.2083333333 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182127861988 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050493681909 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584568894936 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0959514972892 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0614868013183 0.0667264976115 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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