“Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.”
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Every species on Earth is a shining star, ornamenting our mother nature. Though biodiversity argues that saving endangered species is time consuming and costly to execute, I still approbate the endeavor people have made, and that species to preserve those animals and plants should not depend on what cause them endangered.
Most humans have reached a consensus that many species that face extinction are mostly germane to our activities, such as forest cultivation, hunting, etc. Therefore, some may propose that our responsibility to save the species is restricted only to those that are affected by us. They may take Darwin’s theory as an explanation, which assume that species on Earth are always appearing and disappearing, and that it has been a continuous process for billions of years to ensure the species are dynamically tuned to the environment. For example, dinosaurs and mammoth elephants are surely not “supposed to” exist now, since the climate does not fit their body. Also, much of the solutions for saving species are staggering costs for governments, some of them even ban stop the developing countries from economic growth, in order to save species. It would be uneven and certainly intrude intruding the soverignitysovereignty of specific nation, since they cannot decide how they are going to develop their countries. Brazil is one of the famous examples. They faced a dilemma of whether to continue cultivating the Amazon rainforest, or to stop chopping trees and sacrifice their paper industry. Some would then insist that as long as the species are not severely affected by the activities, Brazilians should be free to do what they want, instead of being supervised by other countries.
Nevertheless, those who advocated to save species that face extinction due to humans cannot even precisely identify whether each of them is under human’s threat. It has been known that extinction occurs sue due to temperature, habitats, rainfall, or even magnetic field from the Earth. Also, it is sometimes impossible to select specific species to preserve and omit the other, since many species live in the same place. Moreover, although Darwin’s theory is somewhat a mainstream view towards evolution, the minor species on the plant are still valuable to discover, since they provide lots of information of what happened, and the environmental status in different times. No one would reject a fossil of an extinct animal or plant, rather taking it with care and investigating it thoroughly; then it should also be fascinating to preserve endangered species, which is as exciting to explore the sensation of life.
Biodiversity and species preserving have been highly debated. Although some may argue to do it passively and present human’s least duty to ensure economic growth, I see every animal and plant as irreplaceable and dazzling, and more efforts is needed to keep the wildlife. In this way, not only we can learn from the species, but is also more realistic to execute species preserve as a whole.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 366, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ion, which assume that species on Earth are always appearing and disappearing, and that it has been ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, then, therefore, as for, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2555.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 489.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22494887526 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9058693071 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533742331288 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 807.3 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.8727774922 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.473684211 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7368421053 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26315789474 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230517700624 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704561855745 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049872608308 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144355591847 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328827818252 0.0667264976115 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 100.480337079 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.