Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
The cause of an animal`s extinction is a varied subject. Extinction is most often caused by environmental problems. Humans, in particular, pose a great threat to certain species. Among other things, the threat may be an expansion of society into an animal`s habitat, the use of certain materials, or, the most obvious, hunting. All of the aforementioned human endeavors can lead to certain animals` endangerment and eventual extinction. The question is, if we are responsible for these animals endangerment, are we held equally responsible to make efforts to save these species? I believe that, yes, we are, in a way, responsible.
The most obvious and clear example of humans causing species extinction is hunting. This is the most direct way that animals go extinct. The areas in which hunting is most prevalent have lost entire species due to humans. In this case, humans most definitely have a responsibility to help rebuild what we`ve destroyed by re-introducing these animals back into where they have gone extinct.
Another prevalent form of human invention that harms the animal kingdom is expansion. Specifically, humans building further and further into areas that were once teeming with wildlife. The state of Florida is an excellent example of this. What was once a state of wetlands and luscious forests has become a prime tourist destination. In just my twenty year lifetime, I have seen this happen to numerous natural areas and it is only happening with more frequency as the population balloons. AS cities prosper and expand, it is the animals who take the hit.
Finally, the most topical reason that humans have harmed animal populations is the materials we use in our everyday lives. The foremost example of this is plastic. While used ubiquitously, plastic is not a bio degradable material. Therefore, it tends to get blown by the wind or carelessly disregarded by people into animal habitats. This is why sea turtles get can rings stuck on their neck or raccoons get their paws stuck in a plastic cup. This is why many places are aiming to cut out plastic use entirely. One only needs to see images of ocean pollution to receive the chilling reminder of human`s footprint on the animal world.
Of course, one must contest to the fact that not all endangered animals are in trouble at the fault of human error. After all, species have naturally become extinct for millennia. In these cases, humans bare none of the burden of saving the species. This is, to put it laconically, the circle of life. However, if there is a clear indication that humans are responsible for the endangerment, they should have a part in restoration when possible.
While society will, and should, continue to expand as populations increase, we should do so with an awareness of where we are building. If a species is endangered due to human habits, and can be remedied, we should most certainly make an effort to do so.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 340, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
...terials, or, the most obvious, hunting. All of the aforementioned human endeavors can lead...
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Line 1, column 503, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
...ion is, if we are responsible for these animals endangerment, are we held equally respo...
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Line 4, column 367, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'ring'
Suggestion: ring
...bitats. This is why sea turtles get can rings stuck on their neck or raccoons get the...
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Line 4, column 640, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n's footprint on the animal world. Of course, one must contest to the fact ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, after all, in particular, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2458.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 491.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00610997963 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87797841138 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531568228106 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 785.7 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2837986968 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.2903225806 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8387096774 23.4991977007 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.70967741935 5.21951772744 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163394001523 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432735582755 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483366034062 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0955023154541 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454350138803 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 100.480337079 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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