Some believe the more comforts a society provides, the more likely it is to create people who
cannot provide for themselves. Others believe such comforts are indicative of a society’s selfs sufficiency.
In today's world, everyone aims to live a comfortable life. Nowadays, people have become very complacent and want everything at the tip of their hand. In my opinion, the comforts provided by a society should be such that they do not overpower a person or make them feel gratified. On the contrary, it should make a person use these comforts in such a way that one does not overuse or become fully dependent on them.
When we go back in time and think about our grandparents, they never had the kind of comforts and luxuries that we have today. Nevertheless, they lived a happy life even then. To name some, the luxury of travelling in private cars, use of mobile phones and laptops was never a thing during that time. The people used to assiduously walk for about 4-5 miles to reach their destination without complaining about a thing or two. From the lavishness of smartphones and laptops to the grandiloquent homes of people today, the people in the past never had any of these at those times. Still people lived with great comfort and a jovial life.
When people of today complain about the pressure of work, they can never compare it to the past times. Without the aid of huge and powerful machines and industrial equipments, long hours of work can be cut down to only a few hours, but people at that time had to work persistently, without breaking a sweat to earn their bread and provide for their family as well. Likewise, is the use of social media. Using social media, we can travel the world on one click. Without a doubt, it is one of the greatest invention of today but the onus is on us whether to use it for our benefit or to get addicted to it.
If we learn to use these comforts provided today to bolster our efforts, it can help big time in timesaving and minimizing energy consumption. It is clever not get over-relient on these comforts and not allow them to get on top of us. These comforts has catapulted humanity and society to tackle any issue that comes its way, giving rise to more capable and achieving people. To use it wisely could help humanity prevail in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 606, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r our benefit or to get addicted to it. If we learn to use these comforts provid...
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Line 7, column 251, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'have', 'haven'.
Suggestion: have; haven
...hem to get on top of us. These comforts has catapulted humanity and society to tack...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, likewise, nevertheless, so, still, then, well, kind of, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 381.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52230971129 5.05705443957 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49472822002 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51968503937 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3890165787 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6842105263 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0526315789 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175279612433 0.243740707755 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529368137348 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490331389679 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112975642749 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454107412344 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.1392134831 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 48.8420337079 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 12.1639044944 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.