Some believe the more comforts a society provides, the more likely it is to create people who
cannot provide for themselves. Others believe such comforts are indicative of a society’s self-sufficiency.
The role of the society in developing its people life cannot be ignored as it plays a vital role in providing the necessary facilities to the people. The prompt posits that some people believe that comfort provided by the society to its people is more likely to make people lazy, while some believe that it is a sign of self-sufficiency. In my opinion, I mostly agree with the claim that such comforts are necessary for the people’s betterment for the following three reasons.
First of all, when the people will get all the resources which they want, then they are more likely to give their 100% effort in their task. Eventually, when any person gives his/her 100% effort, then in most of the cases, the result will be positive and he/she will likely to succeed in his/her task. Giving the comfort to the people by the society will play similar kind of role as describe above. For instance, if any country is fully developed and it provides all the necessary equipment to the people living in there, then it is more likely that people will be satisfied with the country and as a result this will maintain the peace throughout the country. In this case, providing the comfort to the people will not only maintain peace but also people will give their 100 % effort in their daily task.
Second of all, for tackling any kind of problem, any country or society requires the necessary resources. If the society has all the resources then they can tackle any kind of problem. For example, in the December 2019, the world had encounters a new strain of virus known as Covid-19. This is a highly contagious virus that can transfer from person to person easily and rapidly. Now, in this type of case, if the society will provide comfort to its people then it will more likely to result in proper tackling of this new virus. With all the comfort, people of any country can maintain a healthy lifestyle in this type of pandemic and also as a result it will lead to proper recovery of the patients with all the comfort available.
Finally, it might sound apt that providing the comfort to the people will result in laziness to its people. The people will be more dependent on the society but if the people will maintain positive lifestyle and utilize each and every ounce of resources then it will lead to the betterment of people as well as of the society. There are pros and cons of everything and it depends on the people how to react on any particular type of matter. If people will focus on the positive aspect then comfort will always leads to the improvement.
In conclusion, it can be inferred from the above points that comfort given by the society is the primary requirement for the betterment of the peoples and as a result it is a indicative sign of the self-sufficiency of society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...react on any particular type of matter. If people will focus on the positive aspec...
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Suggestion: lead
...ositive aspect then comfort will always leads to the improvement. In conclusion...
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Suggestion:
...t will always leads to the improvement. In conclusion, it can be inferred from t...
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Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, so, then, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, as well as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2294.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 497.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61569416499 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46615123316 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.380281690141 0.4932671777 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 725.4 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7079520282 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.736842105 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1578947368 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.68421052632 5.21951772744 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326425865354 0.243740707755 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122076088528 0.0831039109588 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102582134486 0.0758088955206 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227174081018 0.150359130593 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108755621533 0.0667264976115 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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