Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Leadership is one of the most important factors for personality, and there are many successful leaders in the world, such as Bill Gates in Microsoft and Gandhi in India. But what factors make them successful leader? The argument states two opposite perspective of being competitive or being cooperated. And in my opinion, cooperation and competition are not mutually exclusive, and I will elaborate my perspective by the following two reasons.
Apparently, it is animal's native to race with others, and most of the time it inspires our ability to performance better if we are trying to win. To elaborate, take a famous biological experiment for example. If you stuck one monkey in a room with a bottle of wafer and a banana, it will gradually die because of lack of competition. However, if there are more than one monkeys stay in same room with same amount of food and water, they will try to fight with each other, which makes them live longer than only single monkey. Moreover, in the modern world, the leaders of chip manufacturing companies try to beat each other by developing chip against Moore's Law, which makes the technology improve significantly while the competition of trying to be the highest level in the industry.
However, cooperating and working with others is also key element of being a successful leader. In the reality, there's no perfect human being that can make everything by his or her own. What would happen if they only compete with other without cooperate? History tells us he or she will fail eventually. Take e-commerce industry for example, Amazon cannot be the most competitive e-commerce website only by its perfect product platform. It needs to develop partnership with logistic company and producer. In other word, the whole supply chain from all the industry should cooperate in same point to make the whole deliver process smoothly from upstream to downstream. In deed, cooperation can gain more benefit.
Like a coin has two sides, and the world is complex. Being a successful leader should highly competitive to the enemies and have the ability to cooperate with other people to lead to the better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ith other people to lead to the better.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, however, if, moreover, so, while, for example, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1668.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 338.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9349112426 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66367504308 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597633136095 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.7930981941 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.7894736842 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7894736842 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353737239682 0.243740707755 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0979970195616 0.0831039109588 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109899148305 0.0758088955206 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230105341765 0.150359130593 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734865876314 0.0667264976115 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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