Education has been one of the most important aspects of the modern life. New generations are able to expand their knowledge with the help of well structured education. Since improving skills and making contribution is closely related with the ambition of the individual, I mostly agree with the idea that the students should be able to choose field of study by considering their interests and strengths instead of job availability of the field. I will explain the argument in the following essay.
There is an argument which positions itself on the opposite side. Some of the people who are interested in education states that the students should consider the job availability instead of interests. This argument is based on the assumption which states that the students are most of the time immature. In other words, they are not able to decide their future interests because of undeveloped personality. Furthermore, the interests of the students are not consistent. Since the understanding of the life may change, they shouldn’t rely on their current interests.
In contrast to the opposing argument, students should consider subjects that they are tend to work on while they are deciding about field of study since the desire of learning would lead to students to be more successful than just working by considering future job availability. As a result, students would be able to work on the field with the help of success. Although the job market doesn’t include a job related to that field of study, a passionate student would be able to create a room for himself because of ambition. For instance, when the student of Edison was working on light bulbs with the guide of Edison, there weren’t any job related to electrical science. However, thanks to their decisiveness, they produced a light bulb and they sold it to the market. We enlighten our environment by using the principles that they have formed. One can see that the passion is one of the most important factors which helps the students to be able to reach their goals.
Secondly, although the opposing argument states that the students are not able to understand their future interests, they are able to understand their strengths which are formed at early stages of life, and they are able to decide their interests that will not change frequently. A person makes decision about interests by considering her strenghts. As a result, if the students is able to reach required guide that helps them to explore their abilities, they are able to choose their interests that will sustain for all of their lives. For example, if a student can observe that she is not a talented student about drawing but she is capable of writing, she would form her interests related to the writing. Therefore, she would be able to work on the writing although there aren’t enough job possibility about writing.
In conclusion, the idea of making decision about considering possible job availability is flawed. A student should consider interests and strenghts because they are stable and they lead the student to be more successful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 344, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to field'
Suggestion: to field
...t the students should be able to choose field of study by considering their interests...
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Line 2, column 66, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
... positions itself on the opposite side. Some of the people who are interested in education ...
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Line 3, column 87, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tended'.
Suggestion: tended
... should consider subjects that they are tend to work on while they are deciding abou...
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Line 4, column 655, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t drawing but she is capable of writing, she would form her interests related to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, in contrast to, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 58.6224719101 143% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2578.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 514.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01556420233 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73256489946 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.412451361868 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 797.4 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.3375077204 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.416666667 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4166666667 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.21951772744 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313392382168 0.243740707755 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0954906192956 0.0831039109588 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080703519276 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202861881878 0.150359130593 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299383254165 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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