Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
There are a number of parameters that college students take into consideration while deciding their field of study. This process can often be time-consuming and stressful, as the student wishes to undertake a holistic evaluation in determining the best choice for himself/herself. The prompt introduces two such considerations, which are deemed to be important for college students to consider when choosing their field of study. I agree with the opinion that students should consider their own talent and interests when making the decision, rather than making a choice dependent upon the jobs present in that area. I would elucidate my position using two main arguments.
Firstly, the job market is very volatile, a field which may look very attractive today, due to the plethora of jobs available in it, may present a completely opposite picture five years down the line, or vice versa. For instance, in the 1970s and 1980s a number of countries were experimenting with nuclear energy as a source of power. In such a time period, nuclear engineering became a very attractive field of study that student were undertaking, irrespective of their interest in it, due to the large number of jobs that were available in that field. However ten years later in the 1990s when the unfortunate Fukushima Accident took place, a number of nuclear agencies shut down, and all of a sudden, nuclear study was not an occupation up for grabs. This example helps us understand, exactly how dynamic the job market is, and why important decisions such as the field of one’s study should not be based on it. Instead one’s interest and talents should take up the more important role, as those qualities would push you to find a career path for yourself.
Secondly, even if we assume that the job market is rather static, still it is very important for a person to take into consideration ones interests and talents, while choosing their field of study. Lets take up a situation where a person takes up chemical engineering in school, due to the plethora of jobs that are available in that field, instead of taking up applied art where their talent as well as interest lies. In such a scenario, even though the person would be able to get a secure job and livelihood, they will not be happy at it. An alternate thought of having taken up applied art, will always be lurking at the back of their mind, which would result in a constant feeling of regret within them. Furthermore, since neither their talent nor interest lies in this particular field they will not be able to give their all to the job, and perform at their full potential. This would result in them reaching a point of stagnancy, from where they would not be able to move ahead. So while, they have a safe space in the form of a job for themselves they are clearly not happy with it and are not performing too well at it either. Such a situation deems the decision of taking up a field of study based on job option completely redundant, in the long term scenario, where ones happiness and potential at work plays a very important role.
While a large section of people may disagree with me, and raise thoughts like of how in today’s globalized world it is very important to not take risks in terms of employment and livelihood and only choose the field of study where job security is present. However I disagree with this argument on the simple ground of how, in today’s world, which is so highly globalized, there are avenues for jobs in almost all fields now as long as the student has the talent and interest for it. Which is why students should take up greater independence in choosing the field of study that intrigues them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for instance, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.3162921348 203% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 93.0 58.6224719101 159% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3072.0 2235.4752809 137% => OK
No of words: 642.0 442.535393258 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78504672897 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.03365860172 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6607571286 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 215.323595506 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443925233645 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 950.4 704.065955056 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.6407814476 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.636363636 118.986275619 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1818181818 23.4991977007 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81818181818 5.21951772744 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356778225618 0.243740707755 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117573078163 0.0831039109588 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0957124121592 0.0758088955206 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249617362779 0.150359130593 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810288336654 0.0667264976115 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.1392134831 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.