Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Throughout the course of an individual's nurture, many consider the field of study that a student chooses for their tertiary education as a significant pivot in their life. As a result, the decision of which, and how to make that decision, has been discussed and debated for some time. Some people insist that talent and interest is of sole importance. Others argue that job vacancies in the market is the variable to consider. It is my utmost belief that a student should truly focus on which field of study calls to their attention instead of setting sight on a discipline that is constituent of a multitude of job opportunities. I would like to use the following paragraphs to elucidate my standpoint.
First and foremost, when simply considering a job with regards to payment and promotional opportunities, there bears no doubt that one in which an individual is specialized in and intrigued by would be higher up in tier. When you consider the proportion that each discipline takes up, it can be inferred from the equilibrium of the demand-and-supply model of labor economics that the number of people in the field of study is roughly commensurate to the proportion of job opportunities in the market. It is safe to assume that a finance major is likely to pursue a job in finance and an art major more often than not would prefer a career in arts instead of the other way around. This implies that the ratio of competitiors for a job opportunity would be roughly proportionate to the number of people in the field, which is in turn positively correlated to the number of job vacancies. Such phenomenon renders the concept of a varying job availability annul, giving students more reasons to consider what they can do best or would like to spend time mastering in as their field of study.
Even if we set aside the concept that competitors of a job is likely proportionate to the availability of jobs in a certain field, it is still inappropriate to consider the number of job vacancies as a dogma to follow. Proponents of the concept that job availability is of highest priority usually argue that job stability, which is usually created by a plethora of job vacancies, can mitigate the volatility of income flux. While it's undoubtedly true that a steady flow of income is appealing to a considerable proportion of the population, I believe that is is spurious to put so much emphasis upon job stability. The reason is that the concept on a stable job is actually not stable. A seemingly immutable career today could very well be precariously replaced in the future, which implies that many jobs run the risk of instability some time in time. If a steady job today is tantamount to a vocation with fewer vacanies, then an individual might as well choose a career that can bring them considerable pleasure, and try to adapt as the everchanging labor market molds itself. In preparation for a job that they find pleasure in, students should therefore consider fields of study that is more attractive to them.
By way of conclusion I would like to reiterate the importance of a student's talents and interests when considering their field of study for their undergraduate work. Firstly, the number of persuers for a job is commensurate to the number of people in a certain field, which is, by law of demand-and-supply, roughly proportionate to the number of job vacancies. Equally noteworthy is that even though a high job availability implies a high job stability for the time being, which is desireable to most of the population, a job is never truly fixtured for eternity and is still susceptible to future replacements. All in all, I truly believe that choosing a discipline that can intrigue a student is of much higher precedence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the highest'.
Suggestion: of the highest
...of the concept that job availability is of highest priority usually argue that job stabili...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: is
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...tionate to the number of job vacancies. Equally noteworthy is that even though a high j...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, if, so, still, then, therefore, well, while, no doubt, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 35.0 13.6137724551 257% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 49.0 28.8173652695 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 104.0 55.5748502994 187% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3110.0 2260.96107784 138% => OK
No of words: 643.0 441.139720559 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8367029549 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.03561760524 4.56307096286 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04795044427 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 204.123752495 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430793157076 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1005.3 705.55239521 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.0340296061 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.363636364 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2272727273 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.18181818182 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.20758483034 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331347177326 0.218282227539 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10646898598 0.0743258471296 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847114323336 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23468633023 0.128457276422 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498507042226 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 98.500998004 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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