Some people believe that competition for high grades motivates students to excel in the classroom. Others believe that such competition seriously limits the quality of real learning.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Whether students need to be evaluated with exams and compete for higher grades has always been one of the major concerns regarding our educational system. It is certainly true that tests and grades are necessary in order to distinguish the best students from the others, or just to evaluate the overall quality of education in a school. On the other hand, I feel like the competition that naturally arises from the above cited tests and grades is counterproductive for the students.
Every educational system is based on grades and ranking. While for some countries like the United States this concept of students’ ranking might be overstressed by tools such as GPA, for others, as for example Italy, students are concerned with every year’s final grade without being stressed over a school placing or any kind of rating. As an Italian student who has attended one year in an American high school, I had the chance to experience both educational systems and came to a final conclusion.
While studying in the United States I realized that the majority of students were driven to study mostly just to get higher scores and increase their GPAs. This could then represent a lucid proof that competition for high grades motivates students in doing their best and excelling in the classroom. In my opinion though, the urge of studying just to get good grades comes in great contrast with the real goal of schools: learning.
I believe that students should enjoy studying for what the latter can give to them. Exploring new concepts, enlarging our knowledge, discovering curiosities about our world... These are the real objectives students should keep in mind while studying. Competition among students and moreover the fear of not reaching the highest grades of the class drive the students away from the real meaning of studying and learning.
In conclusion, I would say that it is possible for some students to use this competition for higher grades as a way to improve and do better. It is also true that classifying students in ranks is essential for our educational systems. On the other hand, I think that for the majority of students it is just a distraction from the true meaning of learning, and that tends to overcome the positive sides about studying with anxiety and stress for not being the excellence.
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..., the urge of studying just to get good grades comes in great contrast with the real g...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, while, as for, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1940.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 390.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97435897436 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67849447934 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512820512821 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.7928433294 60.3974514979 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.333333333 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0666666667 5.21951772744 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243536304585 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859366104513 0.0831039109588 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447429882477 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143248266456 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.015474298586 0.0667264976115 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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