Some people believe that competition for high grades motivates students to excel in the classroom. Others believe that such competition seriously limits the quality of real learning.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Education is the backbone of our society and with the help of which a person can achieve great accomplishments. However, there is a tremendous competition among the students to aquire education from the best universities, all across the globe in hopes of having a stable career. This competition is much more severe in highly populated countries like the USA, China, India, etc. The prompt present two sides. First, the prompt suggests that many people believe that this competion is fruitful in a way that it motivates students to excel in classroom. While secondly, it also present the view the many other people believes that this competion infact limits the quality of real learning. Well, I mostly agree with the latter position for two main reasons, that I will elucidate below. However, I do concede that there is need for a healthy competition to prevent student from getting complacent.
To begin, the main motive behind acquiring education is to implement what you have learned. However, the quality of learning is significantly degraded when students just focus on getting good grades in classroom. Due to high competition practical knowledge is taken for granted and student's knowledge is limited to textbooks. Many students don't pay attention to the fundamentals of a subject and are just invested in learning in a question answer format. But in real life such knowledge is superficial and in any applications one needs to understand the fundamentals of a field. Like for example, knowning that car runs on diesel/petrol isn't enough of mechanic. Hence, it is fair to conclude that high competition have a bad effect on the method to aquire knowledge.
Secondly, high competition have ample of deleterious effects on students mental and physical health. Parents enroll students in extra classes at an earlier age in the hopes that students will have an advantage when preparing for colleges and unversities entrance exams. Due to this, the students are deprived of time to spend on any physical activities. This high competition also leads to stress build up in students at a very young age. Student's enthusiam is severely degrade and this is reflected in rest of their career. Hence, I believe that this excessive competition have a lot of damaging effects on students.
Lastly, however I do believe that a healthy competition in any classroom can motivate students to present the best of their abilities. At any the point of life, a person have to deal with competion. So I believe it is better if students get a taste of it earlier in their life. However, this competition needs to be kept in check. This can be done with consistent councelling throughout their educational years. This can help students to learn with the best for their abilities and perform with consistency.
In conclusion, it is fair to say that unregulated competition can severely affect the quality of real learning. However, this competition can be turned to students advantage if it is controlled.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2507.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 493.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08519269777 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89947494836 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47261663286 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 779.4 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.1940218193 60.3974514979 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.4482758621 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89655172414 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334777944445 0.243740707755 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862260581103 0.0831039109588 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511137920621 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189743834888 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561491814281 0.0667264976115 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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