Some people believe that competition for high grades motivates students to excel in the classroom. Others believe that such competition seriously limits the quality of real learning.Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with

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Some people believe that competition for high grades motivates students to excel in the classroom. Others believe that such competition seriously limits the quality of real learning.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

Regarding students and their performances, there are two conflicting views. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that competition for receiving good grades encourage students to perform well in the class. Others, on the other hand, take a radically different view and allege that this competition could restrict students' learning. In what follow, first the justification of each side is delineated, later on, my personal perspective, having been inspired by the rationale of each side is explicated.

To commence with, attend school or university and reach a higher education is the most important life goal for every mature human being and they bend over backward and make their efforts so as to reach their goals. Broadly speaking, a performance of students not only can play a key role in their success but also can help them in their future lives. In fact, students have to compete with others in order to be the best and reach the pinnacle of their education. As a vivid example, students should fight and study hard to gain enough information and as a result, receive great scores, this behavior not only can foster a sense of competition but also can teach students how to do their best in order to be successful. To elucidate more on this issue, competition for high grades provides an opportunity for students to be successful both in their professional and personal lives and helps them decide their path.

On the other hand, some students may not be able to compete for receiving good grades and this will cause stress which inhibits learning deeply and wisely. If we take a minute to ponder over it, although competition provides fertile ground for students to be encouraged to perform well in the class, it might have deleterious effects on the performance of students in the long run. For instance, vast majorities of students prefer to be knowledgeable and gain more information day in day out rather than compete for good scores. So, in this case, they will be more likely to make a conspicuous progress and experience less stress than other students who fight for grades and try to be the best in the class. Going into the depth, compete for grades might not guarantee the future of students and not only can prevent students from learning effectively but also can impose stress.

Personally, I lodge myself somewhere between these two views. Receive good grades is an inseparable part of education and students have to try and compete for high scores in order to be successful in their personal lives. Actually, they should try to perform in a way that this competition does not limit their learning. If they just concentrate on competition and reach good scores, they will not be able to make a progress day in day out. As a matter of fact, this competition might create a gap between their grades and learning because they allocated most of their times to compete for good grades. In my opinion, students should strike a balance and compete in a way that their learning improves dramatically and helps them to be a self-sufficient and knowledgeable person in near future.

In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, regarding, so, well, as to, broadly speaking, for instance, in fact, as a matter of fact, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2629.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 534.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92322097378 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80712388197 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72541144659 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447565543071 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 807.3 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7207748275 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.19047619 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4285714286 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.19047619048 5.21951772744 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190322249397 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703055503889 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518688554725 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109053414786 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607751593096 0.0667264976115 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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