What change would make your hometown more appealing to people your age?
The 21th and 20th centuries are characterized by all the momentous changes they have made in humans' lives. Perhaps the most important milestone of these two century is the changes of towns and cities. There is no doubt that changes in cities have been developed dramatically and myriads of new technologies have been created in recent decades. Bearing this fact in mind a question that is a matter of debate a controversial one is whether what change in the city will be attractive for people in my age. Agreement is yet to be reached on this issue; however, I am personally on the conviction that with the advent of new technologies there are variety of things which may attracting to people. In the following paragraph, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
One compelling reason, lending credence to the stance taken above is that expanding the use of internet and improvement of higher internet speed will certainly make vast majorities of people appealing. Scientifically speaking, in all around the globe people always were willing to gain many information about different subjects in various realm. In fact, higher speed of internet will patronize people in order to attain enough knowledge because not only can internet be the best source for gaining information but also can encourage people to reach higher level of education in every city. Delving further into the issue reveal that crowds of educational package are provide in different web site that hardly ever can people benefits from those package with lower speed of internet. In fact, higher internet speed is needed for people to be able to access to such valuable information. Actually, not until higher internet speed become widespread in my hometown can people enhance their life especially education. A noteworthy refreshingly intelligible statistic revealed by recent social research conducted in our country; show that towns and cities with widespread of higher internet speed coverage in whole regions are more likely to attract people in my age.
Another reason that is equally important if not more is that in today's hectic world, a plethora of people are communicating through internet by voice mail, email and other means of communication. Broadly speaking, higher internet speed not only can provide fertile ground for people to send their massage in a second but also provide them with the best means of communication. To put it in other word, in this way, hardly ever lower speed of internet can make people appealing to the city due to the fact that communication through internet become increasingly popular among people in my age. However, what I alluded to above cannot be overgeneralized to all contexts. Alongside with the innumerable benefits it has, indisputably, higher internet speed may run people in my age into huge problems. For example, addiction to the internet is one of the most significant problems in which prevent people from lead a healthy lifestyle. Nevertheless, it does not make those preceding benefits pale.
To wrap it up, there are vast majorities of items which can be appealing for people by the advent of new technologies. Contemplating all the aforementioned reason one soon realize that internet with high speed can provide an opportunity for people in my age to enhance their education due to the fact that most educational package are provided in many web site. In addition, higher internet speed will patronize people in order to use different means of communication such as voice mail, email and so forth. It goes without saying that in this way, people are more likely to be attracted to my hometown.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 287, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: much information; a good deal of information
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'provided'.
Suggestion: provided
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Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: website
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Message: Did you mean 'message'?
Suggestion: message
...fertile ground for people to send their massage in a second but also provide them with ...
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Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: website
...ducational package are provided in many web site. In addition, higher internet speed wil...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'so', 'broadly speaking', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'no doubt', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.262015503876 0.229887763892 114% => OK
Verbs: 0.141085271318 0.158761421928 89% => OK
Adjectives: 0.100775193798 0.0866891130778 116% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0666666666667 0.046263068375 144% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0325581395349 0.0685040099705 48% => OK
Prepositions: 0.148837209302 0.118717715034 125% => OK
Participles: 0.0511627906977 0.0351676179071 145% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.84063002676 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0356589147287 0.0309702414327 115% => OK
Particles: 0.0015503875969 0.00188951952338 82% => OK
Determiners: 0.0666666666667 0.0887237588012 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0248062015504 0.0209618222197 118% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0139534883721 0.0139019557991 100% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3643.0 2387.08602151 153% => OK
No of words: 597.0 408.028673835 146% => OK
Chars per words: 6.10217755444 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94303383012 4.48200974243 110% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.385259631491 0.338922669872 114% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.269681742044 0.251872472559 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.194304857621 0.174417080927 111% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.134003350084 0.112833075102 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84063002676 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453936348409 0.524397521467 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 54.8643444431 59.2087087015 93% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 24.875 20.5533526081 121% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7311452821 48.84282405 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.791666667 120.699889404 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.875 20.5533526081 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.625 0.644075263715 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 51.8431742044 45.7405998639 113% => OK
Elegance: 1.92258064516 1.45489161554 132% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156890369555 0.300154397459 52% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0973930660246 0.103427244359 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0476451052522 0.0752933317313 63% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.506893328375 0.497263757937 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.122772854727 0.151897553556 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704515509431 0.114077575197 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481481721155 0.0781384742642 62% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.559356236667 0.336927656856 166% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.108920946339 0.067059652881 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128384123064 0.210909579961 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428311317136 0.0618886996521 69% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8870967742 151% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 17.0 8.42114695341 202% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.6433691756 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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