Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and
environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only responsibility of corporations, provided they
operate within the law, is to make as much money as possible.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your
reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the
views presented
All around the world, the governments usually require corporations to, in one way or another, participate in balancing the economy, labor market and the well-being of the societies they are incorporated in. The statement mentions two claims which oppose eachother, one that supports the promotion of the societies' well-being by corporations and one that supports corporations should be operated solely as money-making outlets. I definitely agree with the first statement, as it represents my position.
Corporations should, usually are, legally required to improve the situation in the societies they operate in. In many countries, they are strict regulations that state a certain percentage of the employees in that corporation to be of the town's residents. This allows the job market to flourish in that specific society, and provides more job opportunities for the residents, which postively enhances the economical aspect of the society. Additionally, regulations regarding the preservement of the environment surrounding the corporation's will force them to consider the well-being of the nature, and obscuring any activities that might cause serious harm to the environment and it's inhabitants. If corporations were given the responsibility of only making money, without clear rules of how their activities should include the society, that might backfire in the form of rejection by the residents or citizens of the city or town.
Corporartions are already factories for money-hungry business people who have no objective but to make more money, and use every resource they have to reach that objective. Supporting this behavior - in which corporations are inconsiderate towards the societies they operate in - will lead to the complete neglegence of the needs or complaints of the people of the society, for example, if any of the activities carried by a specific corporation is an inconvenience or harmful, in some way, for the local society, not much attention will be given to resolve the issue, since no rules or regulations force these corporations to communicate with the people. So, allowing corporations to act as money-making factories only, indeed benefits the government or share holders, but gives absolutely to benefit to the society.
In summary, I think that corporations should always be improving their efforts in including the society in their operations, on order to form a good bond with the people, as well as allow the economic flourishing of the town or city in which they are operating.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, regarding, so, well, for example, i think, in summary, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 393.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43765903308 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19315081784 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52417302799 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 23.0359550562 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.738290445 60.3974514979 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 178.083333333 118.986275619 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.75 23.4991977007 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.21951772744 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250902514712 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895482937988 0.0831039109588 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454402061288 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153172421826 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0228462531116 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.6 14.1392134831 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 48.8420337079 63% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 12.1743820225 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.2143820225 132% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.