Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being
of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only
responsibility of corporations, provided they operate within the law, is to make as much
money as possible.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own
position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and
supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Big corporations cannot completely ignore their immediate society’s or environment’s well-being. However, the involvement of such corporations to handle the responsibilities requires a great amount of money. Therefore, I believe corporations need to focus greatly on making as much money as possible, provided they operate within the law, to effectively participate in dealing with any apparent issues of society or environment.
To begin, money is the driving force of any business, not limited to a corporation. Essentially, money is required to ensure that a business runs smoothly by meeting all usual demands in a business such as payment of employee salaries, maintenance of buildings, safety regulations, etc. It is virtually impossible to run a corporation without a steady income from sales, services, etc. Thus, a corporation’s target to drive in as much money as possible will help the business to flourish at a good pace. Once a business is steady, then it will be able focus on any apparent issues in the society. Bill Gates, for instance, the founder of the most famous technology corporation has taken part in various ways to help many communities in Africa by providing health facilities. He was able to do such a generous deed due to the profit he makes from his company. Thus, any corporation requires money to take steps to rectify issues or promote the well-being of a society.
In contrast, a corporation cannot take any responsibility to take care of the society or environment if it is not running healthy; facing loss monthly or profits are not greater than losses. This scenario will result negatively for the company, which will not survive the business market. Without any money, taking responsibilities to look after the environment is impossible because any measure to take actions to rectify any issue requires a huge sum of money. For instance, participation to take measures to plant trees due to massive deforestation requires the purchase of many resources. This requires a lot of investment from corporations, which are received by environmental organizations to take steps to solve the problem of deforestation. Thus, money is required from the corporations, if they decide to help societies or environment.
To conclude, corporations cannot solely focus on holding responsibilities to promote the well being of a society or environment. Instead, they can find a good balance between making as much money as possible and giving it back to the society or environment through various channels.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2135.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 404.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28465346535 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28085539252 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514851485149 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7468296273 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.368421053 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2631578947 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52631578947 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256844221103 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823203887291 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796469844128 0.0758088955206 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19841584403 0.150359130593 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104497626772 0.0667264976115 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.