The following appeared as part of the Dean’s newsletter:
"The University of Wabash is considering a community service requirement for all undergraduate and graduate students. We believe that the objective of any university is to produce well-rounded and charitable members of society. The proposed graduation requirement would be to complete at least 8 hours of unpaid community service per month for a total of 9 months. The Dean’s office will maintain a list of approved local charities on its website with contact information. This is a fantastic opportunity for students to give back to the community and gain real-world working experience. Most importantly, local charities in need will receive the help that they need to continue their efforts."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The newsletter proposes a new graduation requirement for undergraduate students as well as graduate students. The requirement states that students of University of Wabash will be well rounded and charitable members of the society if the students complete at least 8 hours of unpaid community service for nine months at some approved local charity organizations. Although a good initiative is proposed in the newsletter, some unwarranted assumptions have been overlooked. Thus, proper justifications for the assumptions is required for further action on employing the proposed requirement.
Firstly, the proposal states that the Dean's office will maintain a list of approved local charities, which will produce well rounded people upon working in such organizations. Arguably, the students will gain exposure to charity environments but they will not necessarily become well rounded just by participating in such activities. For becoming a well rounded individual, a person needs to be in a variety of activities such as games, cultural festivities, etc. Perhaps, the list may extend its ideas to became a more versatile one, if the aim to produce well rounded individuals for the society.
Secondly, the proposal assumes that the students will give their cent percent efforts while working in the charities. This unstated assumption can be inferred by the newsletter's statement that the local charity organizations will receive the help needed to continue their efforts. If the students do not show interest to participate in the charity activities, then the time spent by both the students as well as the organization will be in vain. Moreover, some students might see this requirement as a formality to achieve their degrees.
Thirdly, the proposal also assumes that the involvement in charity activities will provide them with real working experiences. Indeed such activities will be beneficial to students pursuing degree in related areas such as psychology, arts, etc. However, for students pursuing engineering related degrees may not achieve any real working experience. Thus, the proposal might be revised to suit for wide range of students in any field.
Since the proposal appearing in the Dean's newsletter has undertaken few unwarranted assumptions, further explanation is required from the concerned authorities.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 355 350
No. of Characters: 1935 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.341 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.451 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.998 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 136 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.378 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.607 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 167, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'newsletters'' or 'newsletter's'?
Suggestion: newsletters'; newsletter's
...tated assumption can be inferred by the newsletters statement that the local charity organi...
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Line 5, column 402, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...hen the time spent by both the students as well as the organization will be in vain. Moreo...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 128, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
...ide them with real working experiences. Indeed such activities will be beneficial to s...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, as to, at least, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1982.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 355.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58309859155 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09303471004 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52676056338 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9465963884 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.588235294 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8823529412 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41176470588 5.70786347227 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250962814772 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862354435834 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738835631423 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139954784118 0.128457276422 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757435283145 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.5979740519 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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