Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only responsibility of corporations, provided they operate within the law, is to make as much money as possible.
Corporations are entrenched in the modern way of life as we know it, be it for providing employment opportunities to the community, or to ensure quality products and services to the public. The prompt presents two opposing beliefs on the role of corporations in societies. Some people are inclined to believe that these organizations should pay heed to the betterment of the society and environment, while others have a tendency to view corporations as money-making machines only. I strongly agree with the former group of people, for two reasons that I elaborate below.
If corporations were focused on increasing their revenues only, they might tend to overlook critical issues, like ensuring a healthy workload on their employees and workers. While it might be within the law for employees to put their “best effort” while carrying out their jobs, corporations who are blinded by their drive for money may overstress their workers. For example, it is no secret that many Amazon employees have to continuously work for hours, “legally,” at a minimum wage. Some workers have even reported that they are not allowed toilet breaks during their shifts to ensure the greatest productivity. This affects the workers’ physical and mental health, both in the short-term and the long-term, while also promoting impractical and inhumane work practices to other aspiring companies. Should the cost of corporations improving a nation’s economy really be its people stripped of their rights to toilet breaks?
Focusing on the betterment of the society also paves the way for corporations to deliver better services and products, which might gain more acceptance from their consumers, and consequently improve the company’s revenues. For instance, a tobacco company, that puts significant efforts to reduce the virulent effects of tobacco on human lungs may eventually develop a safer form of this omnipresent recreation that people indulge in. This will inevitably improve the company’s revenues and help them proliferate.
Although it might be argued that sometimes the interest of economics and those of societies do not go hand-in-hand, if corporations focus more on the well-being of the societies, it will most definitely help them grow more. The reasons for this have been aptly presented above. At the end of the day, the money that corporations earn are for the benefit of its people, and those benefits will start to dwindle if their societies and environments are not looked after.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, look, may, really, so, well, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 396.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33333333333 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96734686782 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560606060606 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9248065541 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.0 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3125 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213552089912 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662873745025 0.0831039109588 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517736402743 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126306587216 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500650436803 0.0667264976115 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.38706741573 115% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 100.480337079 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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