People today spend too much money on clothing to improve their appearance.
Some people may argue that the increase in prices of clothing is a consequence of the increasing trend of prices of almost every product around us. Although this may partially be a reason why people spend too much money on clothes these days, I do not think that this is the primary reason. I think that people care about improving their appearance too much, which is why they spend too much money on clothing. Therefore, I agree with the statement given in the question. I hold this opinion for three reasons that I elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First of all, the fact that appearance is overvalued by people today can be seen in the way that the society, as a whole, tends to judge people based on their outward appearances. A person who is dressed lavishly will be favored in many aspects of our current society. The worst manifestation of this would be a job interview that my friend attended several months ago. My friend was in his semi-casual attire, since the guidelines specifically mentioned that there was no particular dress code for the event. However, my friend distinctively noticed how candidates wearing expensive suits were favored more by the interview board. This shows that the candidates were largely assessed based on their outward appearance. Incidents like these send the message that people need to spend more money to make themselves look better, and many people in today's world end up conforming to such unsaid standards of the society.
People are also encouraged to spend more on their clothes by celebrities and social media influencers. These public figures can always be seen wearing expensive clothes and promoting wearing such extravagant clothing as a way to succeed in life. I saw an advert by a popular Instagram influencer last month, where he plays the character of a male who was initially rejected by the girl he liked. The advert goes on to show that after the male switched his clothes to those of a very expensive brand, he was accepted by the girl. This advert is a classic example of how celebrities send the message that appearance is determined by expensive clothing, and people should spend more on their clothes if they are to improve how they look.
Finally, the proof that a big portion of the society do spend a lot on their clothes these days can be found in the very high prices of today's clothes in general. I could walk into the cheapest clothing shop in my neighborhood right now to discover price tags that are much higher than what I would have found merely a few years ago. For prices to be high in general, there needs to be an abundant demand of such expensive clothes. This points in the direction that people tend to spend more on clothing these days.
In conclusion, I agree that people spend too much money on their clothing to improve their appearances. This is because our society has a high proclivity towards judging people's appearances based on their clothes. Influencers and celebrities also promote similar views, causing people to opt for very expensive clothes. My opinion is also evident by the very high prices of clothes in general in today's world.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, i think, in conclusion, in general, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2610.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 541.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82439926063 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82280071112 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60322049527 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467652495379 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 811.8 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2880677965 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.4 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.64 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.462340574034 0.236089414692 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131865960093 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.160923840704 0.0737576698707 218% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.286662141598 0.150856017488 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11470101504 0.0645574589148 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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