Young people enjoy life more than older people do.
While some people may think that young people are the ones enjoying their lives to the fullest, I do not agree with this thought. In my opinion, older people has the capacity of enjoying life more. I hold this opinion for two reasons.
First of all, in the contemporary world, young people face a lot of pressure to figure out what they want to do in the future. Most young people, however, remain uncertain about their future ambitions for a significant portion of their youth. This uncertainty keeps them constantly occupied in trying to figure out their next goal, which in turn, precludes them from indulging in life enjoyments significantly. For example, when a student graduates high school, they face a tremendous amount of pressure to decide what they want to do next. They are presented with a seemingly infinite number of options in front of them. They can, for instance, opt to get into a job or they can try to get into a university. Each of these options in turn expands into more options in the form of what type of jobs they want or what major they want to pursue. On the contrary, an older person will have reached a much more stable position in life. Their careers are more likely to have been stabilized over the years, which in turn allows them to enjoy life more. The uncertainties that young people face about the future enervate much of the enjoyment out of their lives.
Secondly, young people are not financially independent. While money may not be the only source of enjoyment in human lives, a lack of it does restrain the quality and the quantity of enjoyment that one can have. Besides this, young people are always under the pressure of earning or saving money. This pressure diminishes their ability to enjoy life even more. For example, a university-going student might desire to go on a weekend trip to recover from the stress of assignments and projects that she had faced over the week. However, she might not be able to execute that plan because of a shortage of money. An older person is more likely to have more money in the bank and hence would not have to limit such wishes for financial constraints. The lack of money and the stress to save up can, therefore, cause young people to enjoy life less.
In conclusion, I believe that young people enjoy life less than older people do because young people face a constant uncertainty about their futures and they have less money to spend behind the things that they want.
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Suggestion:
...ch of the enjoyment out of their lives. Secondly, young people are not financial...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2031.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66896551724 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43728470192 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475862068966 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4133567307 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3181818182 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7727272727 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.59090909091 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.454378972917 0.236089414692 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148111157926 0.076458572812 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143184635176 0.0737576698707 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.362498038021 0.150856017488 240% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105305486097 0.0645574589148 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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