Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people . Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
Government funding are one the ways in which they promote merit goods to a society such as education, arts and health facilities .looking at our issue prompt, government funding of arts is necessary to make sure that arts can flourish and be available to all people is quit a better belief than others who believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the art. As i am going develop on my points , though at some circumstances government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the art, I think that the government funding of the arts is necessary to make sure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people.
Firstly, when we talk of arts, we are looking at societies or a countries personal and unique talents which he/she develops with not much efforts, we could find arts in drawings, music, dancing and sport. Due to its diversity across countries, different people turn to have their own personal art or in other word talent which he wants to let known to all people and to whom is a duty of the government to be able to search and find such artistic talents to brand as ambassadors of their country in their specific domain. Such government funding of the arts is necessary since they falls under the country budget set aside for such activities which the government collect in different forms of taxation and offer it back in the economy in the form of subsidies and merit goods in arts turn to be inclusive as well as to promote equality in the country .Hence based on that I believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to make sure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people.
Furthermore, looking at the importance which it brings to each country, I belief it should be the role of the government to take responsibilities in funding this arts so they could flourish and be available to all people. Nowadays, we could recognize some iconic features in different countries due to this artististic characteristics such as Samuel Eto'o a Cameroonian footballer, Bob Marley from Jamaica an artistic musician, Usain Bolt a Jamaican athlete, Celindion an American musician and many others who in their unique nature turn to be ambassadors of their territory due to their artististic nature and to whom I think should be taken upon by the government to funds all the others arts in their respective countries since they have the means to do so and will be face with little or no restrictions in doing so .
Conclusively, though it is a good belief that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts since they might have monopoly over the art instead of the artist himself, i suggest some convention need to be put placed to regularize that and i strongly belief it will be of great importance for the government funding of the arts as it being of great importance for its country and it might be of little cost to them funding as well as it will serve as their pride doing so.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, look, so, well, as to, i think, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 58.6224719101 140% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2454.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 525.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67428571429 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70438493661 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4 0.4932671777 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 758.7 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.2370786517 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 65.0 23.0359550562 282% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 133.651540863 60.3974514979 221% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 306.75 118.986275619 258% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 65.625 23.4991977007 279% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.375 5.21951772744 218% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.579873084965 0.243740707755 238% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.318304286366 0.0831039109588 383% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.190429930164 0.0758088955206 251% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.405743992089 0.150359130593 270% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.180631396147 0.0667264976115 271% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 33.4 14.1392134831 236% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 22.42 48.8420337079 46% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.3 12.1743820225 216% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 11.8971910112 248% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 28.0 11.2143820225 250% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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