Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
Some people assert that government aids to the arts is crucial for ensuring that art burgeons and becomes available to all people, while other might feel that grants from the government endangers the probity of arts. In my opinion, I partially agree with the statement that government aids are crucial for art to transcend. I believe this for two reason.
Firstly, Government aids help in alleviating impoverished artists. Arts protean nature is what makes it flourish in the long run and these impoverished artists bring various novelty in the art forms that can spellbind the viewers and aesthetics for hours. Moreover, funding from state takes away a financial burden that encumbers such artists in proliferation, and this ease of burden makes them put entire focus just on work rather than to left worrying about other outside factors. These funding thus boost the moral of the artists and galvanises them to work consummately. Additionally, when financial burden is subsidised, the arts becomes affordable as artists extra cost in making the art is offsetted. Thus grants help not only artists but also helps arts to become ubiquitous.
Secondly, art projects reach and fame also increases with proper government aids. When help is provided by the government artists become capable of showing their work to larger masses as they get extra money for the advertisement. Furthermore, when government becomes involved with the artists, it also helps in touting the arts at international and national platforms. These kind of initiative makes it possible for aesthetics from all over the world to know about an art work that has been created by an artist residing at a corner of a globe. Thus, these fame not only receive the approbations at prodigious scale but also brings additional financial aids from philanthropist, and art aesthetics, who want to collaborate with artists, from all over the world.
On the other hand, there are critics of these aids who say that such funding makes artist vulnerable to loose his integrity as artist began to incline themselves towards the money factor rather than focusing on their competent skills. But, these people often forget the fact that no artist has ever received praise and fame for a long time if people began to observe the incompetence in the art work. Therefore, probity and integrity can be maintained only by ensuring that the artist is just left to focus upon his consummate skills without focusing upon other extraneous factors as these aids help to transcend art as a whole and ensure that it reaches general mass with as less difficulties as possible.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, kind of, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2192.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 430.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0976744186 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72025433863 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.9756525338 60.3974514979 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.941176471 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2941176471 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.29411764706 5.21951772744 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35845112997 0.243740707755 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124513808058 0.0831039109588 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0813715655487 0.0758088955206 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238432776127 0.150359130593 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076522889862 0.0667264976115 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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