Some people believe that government officials must carry out the will of the people they serve Others believe that officials should base their decisions on their own judgement

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Some people believe that government officials must carry out the will of the people they serve. Others believe that officials should base their decisions on their own judgement.

Should the administration implement some policies by listening to the wishes of the people of the nation or by relying on its own judgement? Some individuals hold the view that the government should achieve goals that originate from the public, while others believe that it is more wise to make decisions based on officials since they grasp relatively more information and more forward-looking than ordinary people. As far as I am concerned, when the government makes decisions about the lives of their people, they should take people’s advice. On the contrary, if the authority make policies related to international affairs, they should base their decision on the experience and judgement of their own rather than the views of their common people.
On the one hand, I concede that the government is elected by the people so that they should serve the people. When it comes to the interests and lives of its people, the government should listen more to its audience. Only through this way could the administration could hold the power. For example, the Chinese government had originally set aside a one-day holiday for Labor Day. But most people think a day off is too short. At the suggestion of an overwhelming majority, the government listened to the people and extended the holiday to three days. Hence people can live a better life and support the work of the government more. However, if the officials totally ignore the opinions from the public and stick to their own judgement, they would slowly lose the support of the people. Therefore, the authority should better understand the wishes from the people and accomplish them in the short run.
On the other hand, when it comes to affairs related to the overall country’s interests instead of the single resident, the government should make decisions relying on the messages they acquire and the condition of the whole nation. The reason I made this assumption is that the administration has a good understanding of all aspects of the country and the international situation. For instance, nowadays, many countries around the world are competing for the right to host the Olympic Games since the competition could bring not only the good reputation for the host nation but also tremendous benefits for them. When applying for the right, the leader of the country must consider the cost of the sports venues and the allocation of staff. Under these circumstances, the government should make the decision based on the whole nation’s funds, places and the probability of success. From what has been discussed above, at the national level, it is appropriate for the leader of the country to make choices based on their personal judgement instead of listening to the people.
To sum up, an insightful official should and is able to make decisions on the basis of the will of the people he serves; meanwhile, citizens should attempt to understand that those policies have undergone thorough consideration regarding the potential benefits and consequences. The ideal world I depict is one in which leaders and the public enjoy a harmonious relationship and both benefit from policy decisions.

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Average: 5.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 551, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...and extended the holiday to three days. Hence people can live a better life and suppo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, look, regarding, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, on the contrary, on the whole, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2634.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 519.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07514450867 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80753930415 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473988439306 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 810.0 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.7468729741 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.428571429 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7142857143 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 5.21951772744 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366858499325 0.243740707755 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103882273694 0.0831039109588 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811679393314 0.0758088955206 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218270290422 0.150359130593 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121648382979 0.0667264976115 182% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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