Some people believe that government officials must carry out the will of the people they serve. Others believe that they should base their decisions on the their own judgement.
A leader is a person who is selected by the people to work for the well-being of the people. Similarly, people select their government officials during an election thinking that they would work for their betterment and bring about a positive change in the country. So here, fulfilling the needs of the people they serve becomes a vital job of any governmental official. This not only pleases the people of the country but holds the nation in good shape overall. That is why, I feel that government officials should always work for the people and must see what the people exactly need from them.
Every government in every country should possess the ability to listen to the needs of the people nonchantly and based on that needs take a judgement. This would not only help the people but also help the government officials to recognize what the people need from them exactly. For instance consider the example of the government officials from Italy. There is a policy in place in Italy, where any governmental organization before taking any huge step has to go through the voting process to identify if people would like to have the change. If majority agree, then only the government officials can go forward with the idea. Many years have gone by implementing this policy and has proved to be very fruitful. As a result of it we do not see any of the Italian media or people from there criticizing their government, this shows how much people have faith in their government and how the government is looking to serve them. So, we can clearly take a lot from this example in understanding why government officials should work taking into consideration the will of the people they work for.
However, I do agree that government officials must have some power to base their decisions on their own judgement but here also, taking an opinion before taking a decision is a much better idea. I remember when I heard the news of public outrage in North Korea because of the over imposition and heavy influence from the government. The outrage was so severe that people came out on the roads damaging properties, causing infrastructural damage and heavy riots. This lead to heavy losses to North Korea and damaged its reputation in the world to a great extent. So, it is clearly evident how influencing people or commanding them can lead to degradation and severe destruction in the entire country.
Therefore, to conclude, I would say that considering the will and fulfilling that will must be the primary purpose of the government. Rather than taking their own decisions, every country must consider adopting the method like Italy which will only help their people and thereby lead to a greater bond between the government officials and the people of the country.
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Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, similarly, so, then, therefore, well, as to, for instance, i feel, as a result, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2294.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 473.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84989429175 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61821377629 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454545454545 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 717.3 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6112093537 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.7 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.65 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35 5.21951772744 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380879812501 0.243740707755 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114547260633 0.0831039109588 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861030773598 0.0758088955206 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249228879381 0.150359130593 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386980884372 0.0667264976115 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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