Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior
Children in our society generally get influenced by anything and everything around them. Since while growing up we learn from various resources like our peer groups or our parents or the digital content that we see around us . I agree with the latter part of the author’s statement that in comparison to the media it is our peers and our parental role models which shape a child’s behavior and influence them the most. Having said that , how powerful each of the above influences can be depends on the child.
Firstly, our family especially our parents influence us the most as in our formative years they are the ones whom we have most of our contact. Majority of children look upto their parents as their role models and try to emulate the things that they do.For instance, a boy looking at his father shave his beard tries to use it on his even though the boy has none.Parents wanting their children to succeed in academics , promise their kids with some gifts so that their children would study , this creates a healthy competition as well as brightens the child’s future.
Secondly, the peers also play a huge role in influencing the a person behavior . As parents influence their children in their own houses . In the outer world it is the peers that influence children the most.Since peers can both make or break you , a person should be very selective in choosing his peers. For instance , peers with good qualities can even help you in starting a multi million dollar company or help you in securing your dream job . On the contrary they can also have a negative impact on a person by involving him in various habits like smoking, drinking and gambling which can have a detrimental effect on the individual.
However, the former part of the authors argument holds true in some cases. Since young minds are generally fickle they believe in whatever they see without thinking about the repercussions of their actions. Since media is always interested in showing things that would create a havoc among people instead of educating them , they sometimes portray the people performing violence superior to others. For instance , all the movies made about the mafia and drug cartels involve a great amount of violence and they portray the mafia bosses and drug lords as being very stylish and cool which gives the impression to the youngsters that doing violence is cool and that they are doing nothing wrong.
In conclusion, I would like to say that even if the people are affected by the amount of violence displayed by any form of media ,it is the upbringing i.e the family values of an individual that will show him the right path. To sum it up , the children’s peer groups and parental role models have a more powerful influence than the stuff shown on media.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, in some cases, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 33.0505617978 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2316.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 479.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83507306889 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48278278734 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51356993737 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.3904909633 60.3974514979 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.235294118 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1764705882 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64705882353 5.21951772744 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 7.80617977528 269% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31335134056 0.243740707755 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101227665993 0.0831039109588 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760646732836 0.0758088955206 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173929860811 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575115710469 0.0667264976115 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 48.8420337079 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 12.1743820225 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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