Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society,
especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more
powerful influence on children's behavior.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your
reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the
views presented above.
In this sophicated, hectic, arduous world social media plays an important role in influencing the behaviour and conveying its messege -right or wrong it may be. The author of the issue suggests that there are two types of groups, one which believes that voilence in media is the main cause of increased violence in our society. And other states that, childrens peer group and parental role modal is much more powerful influence on childrens behaviour. In my opinion, I would like to go with the first group as millenial generation of kids are highly dependent on social media and soley follow it.
To start with, nowadays, social media has strong hold on its consumers and highly influence those who rely and follow these feagures so called social media influiencers. Such king of dependency might lead to positive attitude as well as increase negativity if such kind of messega is delivered through media. For example, if a child is highly influienced by the negitivity or the violence depected in the media, the such kind of behaviour will be reflected in the society. This will surely lead to violence and greater cause for spread of negativity in our surroundings. Thus, media is the cause for increase in society.
Nowadays, even if you open a news paper, youll find half of the paper is filled with negative and sanguinary news and minimal sangune happenings in the society. Such kind of voilent news will surely lead to increase in violence in our society and would eventually be passed on to childrens as they learn through behaviour around in which they have bought up. And childrens easily grasp up the kind of environment in which they live, it may be postive or negative as they dont have the tendency to figure out what is right and what is wrong. thus, such kind of influencial chain goes on and continues to lead to a more and more violent society.
Of coures one might say that, along with media, even parents and peer group has influience on the behaviour of children. But due to hectic schedule of their parents and very little talk between child and parents heave lead to lesser influience than social media. As parents are not able to devote precious time from their busy schedules to have a greater impact on their child and to make a greater difference in their childrens life and help them to differ between what is the correct path to follow. Therefore, due to such kind of lack of intercation, social media has greater impact on the childs behaviour.
In conclusion, social media is the main culprit for the greater violence in the society, as it depicts more of violence around the world and lead unknowingly to influience its audience in wrong path of life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'newspaper'? This word sequence is usually spelled together.
Suggestion: newspaper
...ciety. Nowadays, even if you open a news paper, youll find half of the paper is filled...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: you'll
...owadays, even if you open a news paper, youll find half of the paper is filled with n...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
..., it may be postive or negative as they dont have the tendency to figure out what is...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...re out what is right and what is wrong. thus, such kind of influencial chain goes on...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, in my opinion, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2231.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 466.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78755364807 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51801243732 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463519313305 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.0 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4875106237 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.944444444 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8888888889 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94444444444 5.21951772744 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293310137197 0.243740707755 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102194348638 0.0831039109588 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950167913911 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169066713363 0.150359130593 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0936034454769 0.0667264976115 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6
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