Some people believe it is imperative for individuals living in developed nations to reduce their energy consumption and lead a more sustainable lifestyle, given the evidence for global climate change. Others believe that such drastic lifestyle changes are unwarranted, based on the existing evidence for global climate change.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Global climate change should be concern of topmost priority for every nation as climate change is deleterious. Climate change is not only affecting humans but the whole ecosystem. It is causing aberrant behaviours in nature and these situations will inevitably lead to the downfall of human civilization. I agree with the view that it is imperative for individuals in developed nation to reduce their energy consumption and incline themselves towards a more sustainable lifestyle.
People in developed countries have immense facilities and extremely high standards of living. To provide such standards of living requires a large amount of energy consumption. For example, a large amount of the population have their own cars and would prefer to travel in them which increase fuel consumption and release harmful substances in the atmosphere that are not without dangerous consequences like Global Warming that ultimately leads to the climate change. The high standards of living that individuals in developed countries are accustomed to will only keep increasing with advancements in technology and people will never have enough of the luxuries. This will only lead to profligation of resources and consumption of energy which will cause harm to the environment.
Developed countries need to move towards a sustainable lifestyle where they reduce on their fuel consumption while not sacrificing immensely on their standard of living. This can only be possible if they move in the direction of use of renewable sources of energy instead of the fossil fuels. There is no way that people will suddenly stop using cars and walk to their destination, hence it is necessary to find a middle ground where people enjoy comforts and still reduce on energy consumption, like the use of public transportation. Even though the situation with climate change is not yet out of hand, riding along this path without any restrictions will only push the situation on a downward slope and could result in perilous effects on the planet.
Hence, even though i agree that a change in the living lifestyle for individuals in developed countries is imperative, these changes need to be gradual. Plodding on this path of consuming resources recklessly will only lead to the doom of this planet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 33, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'concerned'?
Suggestion: concerned
Global climate change should be concern of topmost priority for every nation as...
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Line 7, column 20, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ts on the planet. Hence, even though i agree that a change in the living lifes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, so, still, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 364.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26923076923 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90632853651 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489010989011 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.6638197541 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.866666667 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2666666667 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338490122477 0.243740707755 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115018357513 0.0831039109588 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0908776105678 0.0758088955206 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221428895409 0.150359130593 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0820892354861 0.0667264976115 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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