Some people believe that in order to thrive, a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of its individual citizens. Others believe that the well-being of a society can only be measured by the general welfare of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Thrive of society achieved when society put its overall success. If it applicable throughout country it definitely leads to thrive in economic of country. On other hand while more attentive towards thrive, society did not regret about general welfare of its people. They are the part of society, they contribute their effort for achieving success. I partially agree with first statement, some people believe that in order to thrive, a society must put its own overall success before the well being of its individual citizens.
In holding strong economical position, society must put its overall success before the well being of its individual one. In society policies and decision that are made with success of society as whole in mind would works better to benefit majority of its citizen, not just selected few. Individual have their different requirement, while considering individual they are thousand, millions, billions. It's difficult to consider individual requirement.
In thriving of society, multiple organization put their effort to benefit and increase economy of country. While attempting to thrive economy, they fail to take consideration society and human being. Manufacturing industry takes order of mechanical parts such as connecting rod, etc. While forging the parts its creates an harmful environment and hammer sound which very harmful to near society. Mechanical valued much more cost, it's generate great revenue by selling parts. On other hand, society lose their well being. When economic growth going to interrupt citizens welfare it is not worth at all.
I agree with second statement suggest that, well being of a society can only be measured by the general welfare of all its people. Society put overall success because of people who contributed their efforts for achievement. If they were unable to maintain welfare of people, thrive of society may not come in actual. They are also hold an equal importance while contributing overall success.
In conclusion, it's acceptable fact to thrive society put its overall success before well-being of its individual citizens. But on the other hand one can't regret welfare of people because they are important part of society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d when society put its overall success. If it applicable throughout country it def...
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Line 3, column 19, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...ividual citizens. In holding strong economical position, society must put its overall ...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...tc. While forging the parts its creates an harmful environment and hammer sound wh...
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...er hand, society lose their well being. When economic growth going to interrupt citi...
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Suggestion: held
...y may not come in actual. They are also hold an equal importance while contributing ...
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Line 9, column 150, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ual citizens. But on the other hand one cant regret welfare of people because they a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, well, while, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 347.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37752161383 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66771324074 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521613832853 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.4402555559 60.3974514979 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.8181818182 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7727272727 23.4991977007 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22727272727 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.57986036391 0.243740707755 238% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173019862844 0.0831039109588 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.173279593893 0.0758088955206 229% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.378836202548 0.150359130593 252% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119529953575 0.0667264976115 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.8420337079 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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