Some people believe that in order to thrive, a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of its individual citizens. Others believe that the well-being of a society can only be measured by the general welfare of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
I believe that the development of the society is dependent on the welfare of all its people because of the following two reasons. However, in some occasions the interests of individual citizens should also be taken into account for societal development.
The development of a society is truly reflected by the holistic development of it's general population, rather than the selective well-being of some individual citizens. In modern complex societies, which comprises of contrasting and diverse elements, based on the class, race, gender etc., it is indispensable to work for the development of all instead of focussing just on the elites. For example, if a goverment which mostly focuses on the betterment of it's elite, for their own personal benefits, would result in high crony capitalism, and the country would suffer from high income disparities. Additionally, the happiness index or the freedom of expression index is measured taking into account the whole population, not just the top most section of the society.
As the betterment of the general public is important for building a salubrious society, it is also the reason for erradicating the situations which might lead to conflicts or civil wars. When a state is practicing discrimination against the general public, at some point of time, the tolerance of this people would be depleted. That is the moment which gives rise to the internal conflicts and civil wars. For example, during French Revolution, the general population of France was struggling to feed their families, and on the contrary the noble and the elite families were enjoying the luxury and highest standard of living.
However, in few of the situations it also important to preserve the welfare of some specific section or the minority. It might not be aligned with the development of the majority, but it is favour of the progressiveness of the society as a whole. Like, in India, Muslim population is in minority, thus addressing their cultural issues and preserving the cultural heritage would be fruitful for the overall well-being of the society,
In conclusion, general welfare of all its people should be the primary motive of a society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of
...ens. In modern complex societies, which comprises of contrasting and diverse elements, based...
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Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...he society. As the betterment of the general public is important for building a salubrious ...
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Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...s practicing discrimination against the general public, at some point of time, the tolerance o...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...at some point of time, the tolerance of this people would be depleted. That is the m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1836.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 353.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20113314448 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95788694336 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504249291785 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9898952073 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.230769231 118.986275619 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1538461538 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38461538462 5.21951772744 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308834072402 0.243740707755 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105838470361 0.0831039109588 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104454559708 0.0758088955206 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204672648935 0.150359130593 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0908101589476 0.0667264976115 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.8420337079 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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