Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
However does the ever-flourishing technology impact us: positively or negatively? While many critics might argue that contemporary technology impacts us negatively and reduces opportunities for human interaction, yet I consider such views as a judgement based on perfunctory knowledge and experience. Therefore, my cut-and-dried opinion is flourishing technological innovations - and their massive commercialization - affect us positively and give us better chance to communicate and interact with each other. I have following reasons to shore up my position.
Firstly, and probably most importantly, technological discoveries are scientific gifts to our life which have made our life dramatically easier and comfortable. If there were no such advancements, as it is today, people's life would have been quite different and difficult. Take my grandfather, for example. My father often talks about him and say that when our grandfather used to go for pilgrimage to India, he used to remain out-of-communication for more than a month - and other family member used to remain worried for him until his return. At that time, sending letter used to take months due to poor facilities associated with it. The time has changed, however. Today, we can stay connected with our family and well-wishers for 24/7 period. We have mobile phones to communicate, and communication is not limited to phone alone: facebook, twitter, skype also provide cheaper and reliable service. I talk to my brother, who is in USA since last two years, each day on facebook messenger and it makes me feel no different whether he is here with us or in USA. All these things are possible due to technology.
Furthermore, technology has transformed everything - including the frequency we meet our relatives and enjoy with them. Owing to the modern buses, or train services, people can save their time from their hectic work schedule and spend time with friends and family. Therefore, technology has facilitated better and frequent interaction among people. Take example of Chinese bullet trains, for instance. Due to Chinese bullet train revolution, today we can travel with a practical speed of more than 500 kilometers per hour. It has significantly reduced the travel time and thus people get chance to communicate, interact and enjoy with their relatives or friends which helps to consolidate their relationship.
Finally, some critics argue that prospering technology curtails the chance of human interaction; they give the example of facebook while attempting to prop up their claim. They say, due to facebook, people do not interact with real people - rather stay chatting with virtual peoples. Nevertheless, I believe that, in vast majority of the cases, people meet first, know each other and then only they start chatting on facebook. By doing so, they are interacting with each other, sharing ideas and finally making their relationship even more robust. This has given several advantages - like they do not feel lonely, care each other, share ideas and strengthening their relationship.
To recapitulate, Increasing technological discoveries and their overwhelming commercialization are facilitating to enhance the way people interact with each other. Innovations - like discovery of phone, social medias, trains and many more - are reducing the distance among peoples. Hence, flourishing technology is like gift to humanity by the scientific world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 14.8657303371 209% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2896.0 2235.4752809 130% => OK
No of words: 536.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40298507463 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04899610618 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 301.0 215.323595506 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561567164179 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 920.7 704.065955056 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4370072203 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.428571429 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1428571429 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.10714285714 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364332480381 0.243740707755 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083131000284 0.0831039109588 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575708722546 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189886346289 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0190330946188 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 100.480337079 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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