Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Purpose of education is to help us identify suitable path for us which can be followed throughout our life. In order to have basic knowledge and preliminary concepts for the suitable path, we have to go through formal education which offers courses with variety, some of which might seem to abstain us. Even Einstein, who was more interested in subjects like Science and Mathematics had to clear subjects like geography in his school life.
Formal education in school is very important even if some people might not like the courses offered. It helps the students to explore intricacies of various subjects, giving them a wider pool of subjects to choose from. Courses like English, Physical Education helps in the over-all development of student which are important distingushing factor between equally capable applicants whether in jobs or for higher studies. Formal education also creates a level playing ground for colleges looking for dedicated and sincere students. Many colleges, especially in the USA, have higher affinity for students with high extra-curricular activities but average grades against students with good grades but poor extra curricular activities.
Some people argue against the formal education by claiming it forces students in learning and wasting time in subjects they are not interested in. Instead they should be taught courses only in which they are interested. It would enable the students to focus more on their favourite subject, which would eventually lead to higher productivity of student and greater output for the nation. This would also enable more like-minded students to come together as compared to school offering formal education which would not only create increased competition, but also enhance the environment required for learning. For instance, if someone like Einstein was taught only physics and Mathematics, he would have made more discoveries and which would have resulted in better world.
However, it is very difficult for the student to determine their subject of interest. According to a survey by a student body in Indian Institute of Technology Bombay, it was revealed that ~70% of the students studying at the prestigious college were unsure about the choice of their future career. This survey indicates that even engineering students, in an engineering college at the average age of 21 are undecided about career. Therefore, it would be thoroughly impractical and unjust to most of the students in school to be required to choose their career at an early age. Avoiding interaction between students of different fields is often detrimental in future projects, which require thorough coordination among proffesionals of different streams. Even Einstein required to learn subjects like English, Social studies in order to better interact with the people around him. Had he been devoid of this knowledge, he might not have made even of his present discoveries and publications.
Therefore, variety in formal education is necessary for the over-all development of student and well being of society. A society where professionals lack interaction would frustrate an all-round development of society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
...in subjects they are not interested in. Instead they should be taught courses only in w...
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Line 4, column 858, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...tudies in order to better interact with the people around him. Had he been devoid of this knowledge, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, therefore, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 87.0 58.6224719101 148% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2672.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 493.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41987829615 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83139452695 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501014198783 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 837.0 704.065955056 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2628776404 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.454545455 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4090909091 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.86363636364 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136332044601 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471318584967 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459404506646 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0857735748424 0.150359130593 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489556685377 0.0667264976115 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 100.480337079 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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