Some people believe that society should try to save every plant and animal species, despite the expense to humans in effort, time, and financial well-being. Others believe that society need not make extraordinary efforts, especially at a great cost in money and jobs, to save endangered species.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Animals and plants being on the edge of extinction is no longer a “new” issue for us. In the last century, we, humans, have shockingly witnessed the disappearances of several vulnerable species. On our quotidian day, we can easily encounter multiple news, advertisements, and campaigns about protecting the wild, which makes most of us all aware of this matter. While some people advocate that humanity must take responsibility to ameliorate the situation by allocating the great expense of effort, time, and financial well-being to it, others totally disregard this viewpoint. In my opinion, I partly agree with the former for the following reason.
To start with, the intactness of the ecosystem plays a crucial role in human life. Every species is a part of an enormous food chain, therefore, the distinction of one plant can lead to the distinction or outburst of other animals. In either way, it compromised the balance of the ecosystem and therefore directly affects or even threatens human life. For instance, agriculture is the industry that suffers the most from this matter. History has demonstrated that in many parts of the world, crops were seriously damaged due to the excessive growth of insects since the number of birds feeding on these creatures plummeted. Moreover, just imagine, if a certain type of animal fed on rats, such as cats, were eliminated from the food chain, streets around the world would be taken over by rats and it would pave way for the plague to make a comeback and knock on each of our doors.
On the other hand, it is somewhat justified for some people to focus our resources on other more pressing issues. The unbalance of the eco-system is, in fact, a long-term problem and, to some extent, not as urgent as other issues, especially in underdeveloped countries where the resources are highly limited. It would be a challenge for many African countries to spend their budget on protecting the wild when the people there are still struggling to feed their family daily or in some parts of the world that are still dealing with civil war, the safety of one’s being is their top priority and concern. However, this is exactly the reason why international organizations funded by developed countries are formed to preserve wild species around the world with the help of natives. Protecting plants and animals is not the duty of one particular country but the responsibility of every individual who lives and walks on Earth. Those with resources can help financially, those without can help in many other ways. Each of us can have a distinctive approach to preserve the intactness of nature, regardless of our background.
To conclude, deciding to allocate resources on whether protecting plants and animals or other concerning problems has never been an easy question to answer. Nevertheless, I believe that the consequences of us interfering with the balance of nature cannot be ignored and every single one of us is responsible. Overcome the resource differences, we can have our own way to protects the wild and preserve our precious eco-system.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 83, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
...tem plays a crucial role in human life. Every species is a part of an enormous food c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, well, while, for instance, in fact, such as, in my opinion, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2584.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 513.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03703703704 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85612236367 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 215.323595506 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543859649123 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 815.4 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.4155106293 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.047619048 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4285714286 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 5.21951772744 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182460158782 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492429007456 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573466640303 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110913710281 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338080243744 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 100.480337079 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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