Some people claim that a nation's government should preserve its wilderness areas in their natural state. Others argue that these areas should be developed for potential economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The arugment indicates two opposing views: a) those in favor of environment who believe that nature should be preserved by an orderly government, and b) others who believe lands should be developed for the sake of economic gains. I tend to take the position of those belonging in group (b) for two major reasons as detailed in the sequel.
First, we’re living in a world in which resources are limited while demand and consumption continue to surge. There are many occassions where we can harness the resuorces embeded in the heart of the nature so as to meet the ever-growing trend in global demand and consumption. For example, numerous oil sands reserves have been identified by large corporation such as Imperial Oil Ltd. and Suncore Energy, among others, which if left untapped could make energy supply an even bigger issue in the future.
Second, preserving the land does not necessarily entail abandoning it; just because natural areas need to remain protected does not mean that it should be left in their original natural state. Development can occur prodently while taking into account the interest of all stakeholders including those in favor of protecting the environment. Historically, this has taken place in several occassions where the owner of the land adhers to certain rules and regulations to establish his/her intention to preserve the nature while following his/her agenda. Going back to the oil sands reserves, one can see the tremendous efforts put in place by oil companies in order to reclaim the land to its original state once the reserve have been depleted. this ensures a sustainable development leaping economic benefits while protecting everyone’s interests.
Having said that, I do believe that the government should meddle by establishing a regulatory process to help in reaching a balance between economic gains and natural preservation. This enriches trust between the government, the general public, interest groups, and other organizations and ensures sufficient scrutiny to preserve the environment. Afterall, there is no doubt that human beings need to be mindful of future generations to enjoy these natural resources as they are not meant to be fullfilling our current needs.
In summary, two major reasons were presented to defend my position in taking advantage of natural resources for the sake of economic benefits. However, this should take place in a balanced and sustainable manner so as to preserve the nature not only for our generation but for many generations to come.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...te once the reserve have been depleted. this ensures a sustainable development leapi...
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...iches trust between the government, the general public, interest groups, and other organizatio...
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...t scrutiny to preserve the environment. Afterall, there is no doubt that human beings ne...
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...ce in a balanced and sustainable manner so as to preserve the nature not only for our ge...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, while, as to, for example, in summary, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2134.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 406.0 442.535393258 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25615763547 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86344641823 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56157635468 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3655924615 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.375 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.375 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8125 5.21951772744 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244262401014 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705930878857 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554358262425 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127504934552 0.150359130593 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321486171807 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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