Given the context of a third world nation like the US which dominates the world, it is imperative that achievements in science and technology reached its acme in the country, thereby pushing it to one of the powerful nations of the world. However, the prompt suggests that the welfare of a nation’s people indicates the nation’s greatness, which conflicts with my opinion. I strongly believe that the achievements of a nation’s rulers, artists, scientists, and others so forms the backbone for disseminating the greatness of a nation to the entire world. Having said this, the reason I can give is the benefits the nation would reap from the endeavors of its great personalities.
Even though a lot of can be attributed to the welfare of the people to achieve greatness, a nation is broadly weighed based on the current advancements and its past glory. For instance, the rich cultural and literature achievements of various artists and scholars in England still stands as a noteworthy accomplishment when juxtaposed with the literature of others. However, one may wonder about the advantages of these accomplishments to the welfare of its people. To delineate the point, an enormous economy is generated for the common people when its paragons achieve the most out of the resources. To exemplify, a web of economic ecosystem is protected when the ruler of a nation imposes a special tax on other countries for all its export. Nevertheless, it is important to analyze the socio-economic achievements attained. Artistry for example is an important field which enhances tourism to the country, thus generating a never-ending revenue to the nation. This revenue is in turn interconnected with the employment opportunities to the people in and around the premises of a tourist attraction. Thus, the corollary that one can infer is achievements in any form is a boon in disguise that provides opportunities for people’s welfare.
Moreover, a major share of the welfare that people enjoy costs as much as the life of a soldier sacrificed in protecting one’s own nation. Unless a nation puts forward a financial budget for military equipped with sophisticated warfare, it is surely considered as an impoverished one that patently depend upon the advanced country for warfare support. Since there are various reasons that can be ascribed for susceptibility to 3rd world war, a ruler who has extravagantly invested in warfare is considered as one of the greatest of all times. Such is the case with China and US, where their rulers invest enormous amount of manpower and unimaginable war equipment which is an extraordinary allotment to protect its nation from any nearby hostile nations. Perhaps, the achievements of these rulers make up the perfunctory headlines of the news in almost nooks and corner of the world.
To conclude, it is unorthodox to think that endeavors and welfare are almost two disparate sections of a society. In fact, they go hand in hand with each other underscoring the personal achievements of the people as it is unequivocally a proponent for the welfare of the people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 316, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...lfare of a nations people indicates the nations greatness which conflicts with my opini...
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Line 3, column 873, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in almost nooks and corner of the world To conclude it is unorthodox to think th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, third, thus, for example, for instance, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2536.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 507.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00197238659 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01439784778 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471400394477 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 828.0 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.2370786517 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 507.0 23.0359550562 2201% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 60.3974514979 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2536.0 118.986275619 2131% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 507.0 23.4991977007 2158% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 105.0 5.21951772744 2012% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 10.2758426966 10% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366671512552 0.243740707755 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.366671512552 0.0831039109588 441% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0758088955206 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233030566277 0.150359130593 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0861969270966 0.0667264976115 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 255.6 14.1392134831 1808% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -443.13 48.8420337079 -907% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.92365168539 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 201.0 12.1743820225 1651% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.2 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 32.8 8.38706741573 391% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 58.0 11.8971910112 488% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 204.8 11.2143820225 1826% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 58.0 11.7820224719 492% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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