Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility Write a response in wh

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Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge and movie your position.

It is true that every individual has an idol towards whom one has a strong predilection. Many people idolize sports stars and wish to be a successful sportsman, whereas others are overwhelmed by the glamorous movie stars and their plays. Young people are generally the ones who look up to these sports and movie stars as role models and dream to be like their idol. At the same time it is the duty of these stars to fulfill the societal responsibility in return for the millions of dollars that they are paid. They do have an obligation to maintain the decorum when it comes to influencing a whole generation or maybe the whole society sometimes.

Children tend to follow their sports or movies stars more than anybody else. There have been many cases where these stars have influenced people who then became the next superstars. Everybody enjoys watching their favorite stars movie or when the person whom you admire the most enters the ground to play. Even the advertisements and endorsements followed by these stars prove to be influential. Doing an advertisement promoting social awareness or food hunger program has more impact on the new generation when their favorite movie or sports star is involved. It is very important how the superstars present themselves in front of a new generation.

Sometimes even superstars tend to involve into activities which tend to have a negative impact on the society and especially on the minds of young and naive generation. For example if movie star promotes activities which encourage use of tobacco, this could have a very deleterious impact on any generation, or if a sports star is caught in anti-doping test. It is their responsibility how they represent themselves in front of the people who admire and follow them in a way that is benefiting the entire society, especially the younger crowd.

In conclusion, sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. It is the duty of such superstars to keep inspiring the younger generations that lies within the societal and ethical values. After all the new generation is going to be the future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 257, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...within the societal and ethical values. After all the new generation is going to be t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, may, so, then, whereas, after all, for example, in conclusion, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.4196629213 8% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1798.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 367.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89918256131 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75644291853 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487738419619 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3488186701 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.764705882 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88235294118 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432157889554 0.243740707755 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135717667609 0.0831039109588 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148098987693 0.0758088955206 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.279364472281 0.150359130593 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0949612689479 0.0667264976115 142% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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