The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievement of its rulers, artists or scientists. Reason: The surest indicator is actually the welfare of all its people.
This topic raises the controversial issue of whether the indicator of a great nation is the achievements of elites or the welfare for all people. Surely, the achievements of great artists, scientists, and rulers bring the whole nation some chance to take a big step to the next level. However, the existence of general welfare of a nation is essential to grow the scientists, artists, and rulers. Thus, I generally agree with the statement that the welfare indicates how great the nation is and would argue that the achievements cannot be brought without adequate welfares
Admittedly, excellent achievements bring possibilities to open a new paradigm. For example, consider Plato’s “Republic” and several “How-to” books in the bookstore. While Plato’s “Republic,” which is a great achievement, is being read even after thousands of years and has influenced ancient societies to establish democracy. On the other hand, several “How-to” books, which are not necessarily the greatest achievements, do not necessarily pave a new ground to criticize, argue, or develop new ideas. There is no trivializing that great works and achievements bring fortunes and positive changes to the nation. If a nation has more elites like Plato, it will have more chances to break a new ground, which will lead the nation to be great.
However, we must have a stable welfare for all people to even start making great achievements. Jack Andraka’s career demonstrates the importance of general welfare for all. Jack Andraka is an American teenager who developed a diagnostic tool for pancreatic cancer. When he got an idea, he used internet to research and develop his protocol. Then, he used his high school laboratory to produce a prototype of the device. His achievement was only possible at the age of 17 because Andraka had internet, which is readily available in the United States, and relatively safe high school laboratory with adequate kits. His success implies that general welfare for all, not only for elites, allows anyone with talents and passion to pursue his or her dream to make great achievements.
Furthermore, a nation can never be great if it lacks general welfare that guarantees safety for its people. Take Mali as an example during the Ebola outbreak in 2014. When the index case of Ebola was identified in Mali, there was only one hospital in Mali. Indeed, the only working hospital had floods and inadequate medical supplies due to constant civil wars. As a result, the government could not efficiently isolate the index case and its possible contacts and deaths due to Ebola exponentially grew in Mali. This example illustrates how maintenance of general welfare is significant in protecting people. If the nation cannot protect its people, it is far from being great.
In conclusion, I admit that excellent achievements surely brings fortunes to a nation to be great. However, having a general welfare for all is more important to make a great nation because it allows its people to safely challenge themselves to make great achievements.
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, so, then, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2617.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 497.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26559356137 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15075638667 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503018108652 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 831.6 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.2077742377 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.68 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.88 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258196289017 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0812403504121 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807185347869 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164326649989 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0980836103287 0.0667264976115 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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