A Nation Should Require All Of Its Students To Study The Same National Curriculum Until They Enter College.
The speaker asserts that a nation must use the same national curriculum until its students enter college. It is often easy to administer educational system under one unified policy or curriculum. However, I disagree with the claim because unified curriculum inhibits schools to detect malpractice and problem of the system. Indeed, it cannot be a fair system in reality, anyways.
Admittedly, in terms of administration, nothing can be easier and seemingly fair than using one unified curriculum to educate and grade students. We cannot neglect the fact the some schools have different curriculums with different levels. As GPA is one of the most important factors for college admission, some may argue that the students who have studied through a relatively difficult curriculum will be disadvantaged in college admission. Furthermore, using the same curriculum reduces the workload of teachers and administrators of schools. Financially speaking, we can expect saving some budget on developing different curriculums and executing a variety of curriculums in different ways.
However, in terms of reality, use of one curriculum for all schools in the nation cannot be fair. Furthermore, schools and students will be unable to detect problems in curriculum easily. First, students may need different curriculum based on different regions and cultures. For instance, students in California may enjoy physical education class in November while students in Minnesota would have much more difficulty in following the national curriculum due to heavy snow. As another example, students in the Southwest may find learning Spanish useful while other students may not benefit from it much. In reality, we must consider customizing the curriculum to suit each school based on its cultural aspect and geographical trait to be fair for all. Second, we should not overlook the fact that one seemingly perfect policy can never be perfect for all. We have witnessed how imposed unified codes often put pressure on people's freedom throughout the history. Nazis' moral codes, Mao's dictatorship and brutal inquisition in Spain all seemed correct and absolute during that time. Yet, we all know how each historical event had blinded people to realize their malpractice, since everyone was behaving in the same way, and ended in disasters. It is important to leave a room for all schools to uniquely develop their own curriculum which best fits their students, in order to detect malpractice, if any occurs.
In sum, I admit that the speaker's assertion that a nation should adopt one unified national curriculum for its students seemingly has some advantages in terms of administration and economy. However, in reality, it will eventually damage schools and students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...tudents. We cannot neglect the fact the some schools have different curriculums with...
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Line 7, column 26, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'speakers'' or 'speaker's'?
Suggestion: speakers'; speaker's
...ny occurs. In sum, I admit that the speakers assertion that a nation should adopt on...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, second, so, while, for instance, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2329.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 430.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41627906977 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89172276909 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518604651163 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 737.1 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3517847056 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.863636364 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5454545455 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301704981944 0.243740707755 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0931446353359 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117093645113 0.0758088955206 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210820969611 0.150359130593 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0643557632071 0.0667264976115 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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