The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
I agree with the speaker’s assertion that a great nation should have an indication of the great general welfare of its people. However, the speaker unnecessarily extends this assertion to the achievements of its rulers, artists and scientists are not indicators of a great nation while ignoring some vital aspects of society. My points of contention with the speaker involves social order and society advances, as discussed below.
With respect to society foundation-people, I agree that general welfare is important for evaluating a nation’s greatness. People are the very base of a nation, and always being considered the top priority. Only when people’s social welfare is guaranteed, can society’s development makes sense. Or, a society having high development without standard social welfare can’t be called a great nation. Let us look at India. India has a highly-developed technology center in Bangalore which is comparative to silicon valley in America and this country even owns nuclear weapons. However, focusing on developing technology and weapons does not ameliorate the situation that their people are living in a low-level society. What’s even worse, the divergence between religions and people exacerbates the social disorder leading people’s life more miserable there. I bet there is no one in the world who would call India a great nation.
Aside from this point, I fundamentally disagree with the speaker’s claim, rulers, artists, and scientists’ achievements should also be taken into account.
First, the impressive ability of a leader is vital for ensuring a society’s stability. Without democratic policies and stable social order, society will collapse. To be more specific, a ruler’s decisions permeate into every aspect of modern life. For example, during the period of the depression, strong spiritual support and ingenious policy- a new deal launched by the president franklin Roosevelt helped this nation to overcome an urgent and hazardous crisis, his imperturbable ability and the talent to solve crisis protected their people from getting more hurt and bring prosperity back to America. In this case, we could say that without a ruler’s effort and achievement, there will be tremendous riots in a country, which is obviously the opposite of a great nation.
What’s more, most aspects of society's development are related to the efforts made by artists and scientists. Taking a glimpse at the contemporary society, we can’t help but marvel at how advanced and convenient our life is. Thanks to the transportation vehicles, invented by mechanic scientists, we can have a more easier access to various places around the world. Thanks to the spread of internet, ensured by telecommunication scientists and computer scientists, we are capable of run errands sitting in the bedroom. Thanks to the cutting-edge medical pills and methods, researched in the medical and biological field, we could have a longer life span. When it comes to the artists, all of the soothing music and emerging cultural environment are created by them. They are such a release for those modern people under big pressure. Not to mention culture definitely is capable of uniting people so as to increase the cohesion of a nation, which can help a country to get over some huge crisis. Therefore, it is not hard to tell the pivotal places which rulers, artists, and scientists take in a society.
In sum, the speaker’s assertion that artists, rulers, scientists’ achievement are mot important begs the question because what they have done have tremendous ipact on our society. As for the assertion that general welfare is first consideration of a great nation, I simple agree because people are the foundation of a society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 311, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...d by mechanic scientists, we can have a more easier access to various places around the wor...
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Line 9, column 519, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... of run errands sitting in the bedroom. Thanks to the cutting-edge medical pills and m...
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Line 9, column 685, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ife span. When it comes to the artists, all of the soothing music and emerging cultural en...
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Line 9, column 897, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...definitely is capable of uniting people so as to increase the cohesion of a nation, whic...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, therefore, while, as for, as to, for example, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3178.0 2235.4752809 142% => OK
No of words: 593.0 442.535393258 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35919055649 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93473315629 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99788587877 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 309.0 215.323595506 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52107925801 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 986.4 704.065955056 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6187807934 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.586206897 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4482758621 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.51724137931 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27343324275 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669142310296 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082580615795 0.0758088955206 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143640298362 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0975954358334 0.0667264976115 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 166.0 100.480337079 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.