Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and suppo

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Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Education is an irreplaceable means to make students more competitive. Thus, there comes a voice that educational institutions should only encourage students to choose fields of research that can ensure them a lucrative career. Although this claim is not without merits when it comes to their financial support, I still think it is inappropriate for schools to do that considering the uncertainty of research and students’ learning process.

First of all, it is true that an educational institution is obligatory to enhance students and lead them to a better life. To be more specific, schools are supposed to provide magnificent knowledge, insightful suggestions, and help students better adapt to society. Supposing that a student chose a research field that has never come to any results, how could this student support himself after graduation? Not to mention a basic living standard. As common sense tell, a Solid financial basis is almost the prerequisite of everything; having a lucrative career plays a vital role in having better health care, having stable life quality, plus giving affluent support for their original family. This is especially true when it comes to those students who come from an indigent family or remote area. What’s more, preventing students from choosing some research that is hard to realize is also a way to protect them from suffering mental stress of being poor or unsuccessful.

However, choosing a research field merely on its profitability and possibility may be deleterious to students’ academic performance. Although a stable life quality is absolute of significance, students' interests should also be taken into account. Only letting students choose those so-called lucrative research while ignoring what they truly want to dig into might dampen their study enthusiasm, making them a poor school performance ultimately. Also, the author’s unwarranted assumes that studying in an apparent profitable field could actually lead them to success and bring them a better material life. Yet this is not actually the case. As we all know, success is accompanied by diligence and talent; enthusiasm could invoke students’ potential somehow. Accordingly, encouraging students only choose lucrative careers is like smothering their potential talent and even kill their future success.

Some people might argue that students’ interests are transient and fragile so that students are too naive to choose their fields of a future career. But who knows a spark could not develop into a huge fire. Also, as I mentioned before, Schools, serving as street lights, are supposed to give students’ full information, which can help students to make the decision.

Furthermore, considering the over-accelerated society and characteristics of research, it is hard to distinguish whether a research field could be successful or not. The invention of vaccines, needing tons of clinical experiments, are easy to fail in the end. But there do exist some possibilities that research on vaccines could turn into realization, such as the current research of coronavirus vaccine. All we need is more time. Also, with the fast development of technology, those technical obstacles hindering some researches might be obliterated in the future. Take the research in astronomy as an example. Tracing back to the past, it is not surprising that people might think landing on the moon is absurd while discouraging students to choose any related topic about celestial objects. However, with the development of nanotechnology and physics, spacecraft are available, leading astronomy research into a prosperous phase.

Admittedly, that school should lead students to a better wealth life considering its benefits. Nevertheless, any field could be successful with the aid of students’ passion, effort, and technology support. Thus, I suggest school help students make a full evaluation of a research field and their own conditions to make the most suitable decision not the lucrative one.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 433, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to process'
Suggestion: to process
...inty of research and students’ learning process. First of all, it is true that an ed...
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Line 12, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...table decision not the lucrative one.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, thus, while, such as, first of all, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3403.0 2235.4752809 152% => OK
No of words: 621.0 442.535393258 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47987117552 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.991980728 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03259391898 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 316.0 215.323595506 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50885668277 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 1042.2 704.065955056 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1916344001 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.774193548 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0322580645 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61290322581 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225369006317 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610676965044 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562732744726 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140648636202 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541384370402 0.0667264976115 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 172.0 100.480337079 171% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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