The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Many nations are known by its advancements or achievements in numerous fields like politics, sports, science, and technology and so on. The prompt states that a true nation is defined by the behavior and well-being of its people, rather than successes of its rulers, artists or scientists. In my opinion, I mostly agree with the statement that people’s livelihood is very much important to define a nation for two reasons.
First of all, the number of achievers in a particular nation consists of only small part of the population of that country. One cannot consider the greatness of its country only by its achievers. For instance, China is almost ahead compared to the whole world in every field, be it in politics, space programs, sports, science and technology, armed forces and so on. However, because of communist rule in China, the lives of people residing there is pathetic. These successful people get all the benefits from the government but what about the other citizens? For some people living below poverty line, the government is not providing basic needs also. Hence, from the above example how can one come to conclusion that China is a great nation?
Secondly, these rich, successful people like artists, sports people or politicians contribute very much less to the development of the nation in comparison to its other citizens. For example, the taxes that the government collects, 75 to 80 percent of the money is contributed by its citizens rather than its successful people. Why? Because the government have made some tax exemption for them, because they represent the nation. Internationally. Therefore, in many nations, the rich are becoming more richer and the poor more poorer. So, by the above scenario one cannot state that a particular nation is great only by looking at its best side and ignoring its worst side.
In conclusion, one may argue that the artists or scientists are the one who represent the nation internationally, so they are the most important asset to the nation. But that doesn’t mean that the nation should only be known by them, and others should be ignored. Many other people also contribute to the development of the nation, but they are not visible or heard. Therefore, well-being behavior of its citizens is really important to define a nation.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 648, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...government is not providing basic needs also. Hence, from the above example how can ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 498, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'richer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: richer
... in many nations, the rich are becoming more richer and the poor more poorer. So, by the ab...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 523, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'poorer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: poorer
...h are becoming more richer and the poor more poorer. So, by the above scenario one cannot s...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1930.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 383.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03916449086 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75974295405 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514360313316 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.942815942 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.578947368 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1578947368 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47368421053 5.21951772744 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219862658944 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0726997679358 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473101367816 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150466647955 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372053349111 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 648, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...government is not providing basic needs also. Hence, from the above example how can ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 498, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'richer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: richer
... in many nations, the rich are becoming more richer and the poor more poorer. So, by the ab...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 523, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'poorer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: poorer
...h are becoming more richer and the poor more poorer. So, by the above scenario one cannot s...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1930.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 383.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03916449086 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75974295405 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514360313316 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.942815942 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.578947368 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1578947368 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47368421053 5.21951772744 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219862658944 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0726997679358 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473101367816 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150466647955 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372053349111 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.