Teachers’ salaries should be based on the academic performance of their students
Author’s claim that ‘Teachers’ salaries should be based on the academic performance of their students’, in my opinion is not valid as teacher as a profession is not lucrative one and thus providing them salaries on the basis of the student’s academic performance might disincentives them performing their work efficiently. Following are the reasons for my discordance towards author’s claim.
Firstly, Such action would dissuade students to take stand for their ineffectiveness as academic performance is highly contingent on oneself. If student is itself not much concerned about his/her performance than why teacher should suffer for nonchalance of student regarding his/her future. Consider an example, In my college, there were many students who used to bunk lectures to chill out with their friends and they were unconcerned about their credits. If in such situation, professor’s salary is reduced due to low attendance or low score, would such action justify the situation? In my opinion, No, such action might instead giver powers to student as if they don’t like any professor they can use such power against that professor. Such actions also would intimidate professor’s for students and they might avoid punishment in lest of salary decrease.
Secondly, Students academic performance doesn’t depend only on one factor. There are many factor whether directly or indirectly affects the performance of children like parent’s behavior, home environment, society fear, etc. Thus, just impending charges on one factor might not result in fructiferous output. If such notions is implemented in real, then it will insult in invariability in the salary of teachers on the basis of qualifications. It might happen that teachers who have just done master degree have more salary compared to teacher who has done PhD.
However, such notions have advantages too as teachers would be more concerned about the performance of each and every student and might pay more attention on each student. This would also result in students getting enough attention of teacher thus they will prefer to tuition. Such benefits are from the side of teachers. Whereas, students should also work towards improving their performance and take charge of their performance rather than imputing teachers for their performance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 91, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun factor seems to be countable; consider using: 'many factors'.
Suggestion: many factors
...;t depend only on one factor. There are many factor whether directly or indirectly affects ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'factors'?
Suggestion: factors
...pend only on one factor. There are many factor whether directly or indirectly affects ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 572, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ry compared to teacher who has done PhD. However, such notions have advantages to...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, thus, whereas, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 359.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59052924791 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15733953155 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523676880223 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.3031373411 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.058823529 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1176470588 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.519963531152 0.243740707755 213% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153815844829 0.0831039109588 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.14980929971 0.0758088955206 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.346410313899 0.150359130593 230% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137361138646 0.0667264976115 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 12.1639044944 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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