Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
For years, education has been essential part of our society, and when it comes to education, mainly teachers are the one who will reflect student's performance in exam. So many people may agree that Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance. However, the argument may not be completely true. There are other factors also which needs to be taken into consideration for the argument to be valid. So, I do not concur with claim.
Firstly, there are many other factors which decides students' performance besides only teachers. It is possible that student is attending extra classes other than only school classes. In this case the performance of student will be combination of both the school and classes. Also, some student may study on their own at home, while some may not study. So, in this case students’ willingness to learn comes into play. So, in this case teachers’ salaries should be based on their students' academic performance does not seems a good choice.
Secondly, students' performance do not completely depends on their abilities. It is also possible that on the exam day some students may panic, and do not perform well on the exam. In this case, even if both teacher and student had tried for well performance, they may not get good result. So, in this judging teachers by their students’ performance may not be valid. Similarly, if on the exam day student is not well, then also the performance of student will decline.
Finally, for everybody in this world money matters the most. Although, some teachers may be in the occupation based on their interest in teaching, for most of the teachers money matters. If teachers’ salaries would be based on their students’ academic performance, many teachers might start teaching student at home. So, in this case also the claim doesn't seems a good choice.
However, if such a rule is applied, some teachers who may not be giving good attention to student, will start paying more attention to them. So, in some cases this rule might also increase the teachers' efficiency and can benefit to students.
In summary, performance of any student depends on many other factors other than just teachers. So, I would not agree with the given claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'similarly', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'in summary', 'in some cases']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.241534988713 0.240241500013 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.139954853273 0.157235817809 89% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0654627539503 0.0880659088768 74% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0925507900677 0.0497285424764 186% => Less adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0338600451467 0.0444667217837 76% => OK
Prepositions: 0.117381489842 0.12292977631 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0293453724605 0.0406280797675 72% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.72875451021 2.79330140395 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0158013544018 0.030933414821 51% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0767494356659 0.0997080785238 77% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0451467268623 0.0249443105267 181% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0112866817156 0.0148568991511 76% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2263.0 2732.02544248 83% => OK
No of words: 376.0 452.878318584 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.01861702128 6.0361032391 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.58838876751 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.316489361702 0.366273622748 86% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.271276595745 0.280924506359 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.204787234043 0.200843997647 102% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.101063829787 0.132149295362 76% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72875451021 2.79330140395 98% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 219.290929204 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428191489362 0.48968727796 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 44.3520156514 55.4138127331 80% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6194690265 116% => OK
Sentence length: 15.6666666667 23.380412469 67% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.6828905808 59.4972553346 53% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2916666667 141.124799967 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6666666667 23.380412469 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.708333333333 0.674092028746 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.21349557522 96% => OK
Readability: 42.7943262411 51.4728631049 83% => OK
Elegance: 1.45762711864 1.64882698954 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40187661866 0.391690518653 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.121973459749 0.123202303941 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.10900181783 0.077325440228 141% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.491138816639 0.547984918172 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.134454242762 0.149214159877 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151198778443 0.161403998019 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0782467934356 0.0892212321368 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.310737814646 0.385218514788 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.124586515706 0.0692045440612 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263039223842 0.275328986314 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.079730576199 0.0653680567796 122% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.4325221239 58% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.30420353982 170% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88274336283 184% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 7.22455752212 69% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 3.66592920354 246% => OK
Neutral topic words: 8.0 2.70907079646 295% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.5995575221 162% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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