Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Teachers train and shape the future of the society. Many feel that their work is the most important and they being remiss in their duty will affect the society the most. Keeping this in mind, the issue asks the question as to whether the teachers' salaries be based on the results they provide i.e. academic performance of their students? I only partially agree to this. While making the salary proportionate to the academic performance would make teachers take extra care and scrutiny while teaching their students, it can also have some inadvertent effects.
There are all kinds of teachers. Some of them kind, while some of them are harsh and strict. Both of these kind of teachers are working for the betterment of the children they are teaching in their own way. But there are also some teachers who have taken up the job due to the unavailability of other jobs they would have ideally wanted to pursue. A part of these category of teachers are not satisfied in their job and are usually carefree and remiss in their duties leading to a hit in their students' performances. Hence, for these teachers, the above stated precation might make them more disciplined and cautioned toward their duties.
In another case, for the people who love teaching children, dynamically varying their salary with their students' academic performance might make them feel pressurized. These kind of teachers feel backed into a corner and might resorting to teaching techniques that they might not be comfortable with or not suited to them. Their earlier view of their students would change into a view of their own survival. As a result, this would have a perverse affect of degrading the children's performance and also cause a decline in the life of a good teacher's career as well as his/her life.
Finally, teachers are not only important for the academic well-being of their students' but also teach them life lessons, empathize with them and make them better persons as a whole. With the rule stated in the issue, the teachers might neglect the above duty for their own sake of meeting their ends or for aiming higher salaries. The teachers might also start competing with one another as to who would get a higher salary, thus converting this into some kind of sport. This would definitely affect the characterisitics of the futures of the society. These students might grow up into well educated individuals but might not be well behaved, genteel or good people as whole. They might also resort to the under the hand techniques used by their teachers in their own respective fields causing the entire societal standards to decline.
Thus, with the above stated reasons, I would like to conclude that teachers' salaries should not be based on their students' academic performance. It would be better to maintain the salary structure but provide extra bonuses at the end of the year on the basis of different categories such as academic performance of students, most loved by students and so on. This would prevent the attack on the teachers' livelihood while also help improve ignorant teachers in their duties.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 52, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun feel seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many feels'.
Suggestion: Many feels
...ain and shape the future of the society Many feel that their work is the most important a...
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Line 1, column 200, Rule ID: ASK_THE_QUESTION[1]
Message: Use simply 'asks' instead.
Suggestion: asks
...the most Keeping this in mind the issue asks the question as to whether the teachers salaries be ...
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Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: WHETHER[2]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...ost Keeping this in mind the issue asks the question as to whether the teachers salaries be based on the r...
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Line 2, column 99, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...me of them are harsh and strict Both of these kind of teachers are working for the betterm...
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Line 2, column 354, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this category' or 'these categories'?
Suggestion: this category; these categories
...have ideally wanted to pursue A part of these category of teachers are not satisfied in their ...
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Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...rmance might make them feel pressurized These kind of teachers feel backed into a corner a...
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Line 5, column 392, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...on This would prevent the attack on the teachers livelihood while also help improve igno...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, if, so, thus, well, while, as to, kind of, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2531.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 524.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83015267176 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46310325781 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.393129770992 0.4932671777 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 793.8 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.2370786517 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 524.0 23.0359550562 2275% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 60.3974514979 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2531.0 118.986275619 2127% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 524.0 23.4991977007 2230% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 102.0 5.21951772744 1954% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 10.2758426966 10% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228857937273 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.228857937273 0.0831039109588 275% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0758088955206 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173769744915 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634280632621 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 263.3 14.1392134831 1862% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -451.92 48.8420337079 -925% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.92365168539 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 206.5 12.1743820225 1696% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.21 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 32.37 8.38706741573 386% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 11.8971910112 462% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 211.6 11.2143820225 1887% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 55.0 11.7820224719 467% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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