Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life.
The speaker claims that technology diminishes our life quality by bringing more disadvantages than advantages. While it is undeniable that people in the modern world feel many ramifications from technology, in my view, it is unjustifiable to assert it damage our life quality.
Granted that in some extreme cases, technology absolutely damages human lives in irreversible ways. We can see an example in the field of atomic technology. With the advance of the knowledge of the atom, scientists are able to exploit the power of the atom, and thus the atomic bomb is conceived. In world war two, it causes innumerable deaths and pain in Japan. Also, its long term effect, that is, radioactive pollution, has suffering people in Japan. In this view, although the atomic bomb facilitates the demise of the war, its invention absolutely creates more problem and permanently damage human life quality.
However, in another aspect of atomic technology, it benefits human society to a large extent. As a potent way to generate energy, the atomic fission has been adapted to power plants to generate electricity. The attributes of high efficiency and related-low pollution compared to the power plant that burning coal, make modern people enjoy lower cost of electricity without submerging in the air of tiny particles resulting from burning fuel.
Moreover, in many fields, we are more willing to acknowledge technology brings us benefits but not disadvantages. Take the computer system as an example. On one hand, one of its applications, computer games, is time wasted, they nibble precious time of people and cause eye diseases such as myopia. On the other, it also brings us a wide range of benefits, from home to the whole society. In daily life, the micro-computer helps us to drive laundry machines, control the temperature of ovens, monitor the safety at home, and so on. On a broader scale, scientists utilize it as a tool to calculate complex problems, meteorologists use its power to predict the weather, economists depend on it to optimize their investment. It is too many advantages to claim the computer hurts our lives.
To sum up, admittedly, technology can be a double-edged sword, it may bring us bright sides but come with drawbacks at the same time, depending on how people use it. But most of the time technology is follow the demand of human beings, thus, they solve problems and bring a lot of advantage to us. Therefore, we should not claim it damages our lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 253, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'damages'?
Suggestion: damages
... view, it is unjustifiable to assert it damage our life quality. Granted that in so...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 202, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'followed'.
Suggestion: followed
... it. But most of the time technology is follow the demand of human beings, thus, they ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, such as, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2078.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 412.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04368932039 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88450425283 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567961165049 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.38483146067 274% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.592199107 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9523809524 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.619047619 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61904761905 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198253082691 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507957162458 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765049813352 0.0758088955206 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109116394372 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0802738255384 0.0667264976115 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.