To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Some might think that to understand the most important characteristics of a society one must study its major cities, but I disagree. Just looking at the major cities of a society can give a warped view of a society and cause one to draw conclusions about the characteristics of the society that do not apply outside of the major cities.
The major cities of a society is nearly synonymous with the urban areas of that society. Urban areas formed around the hotspots for trade, work, and food and they still remain the most major cities for most of the world. When thinking of major cities of the world Tokyo, Paris, London, Dublin, New York, and San Francisco, to name a few, all come to mind. But these individual cities are far from representative from the society as a whole. If one thinks that the characteristics of these urban cities can be applied to the rest of the society they are mistaken.
For example I grew up in Northeast Ohio in one of the suburbs right outside of Cleveland, then for college I moved to Columbus, Ohio. Cleveland and Columbus are two of the most major cities of Ohio, and both are very urban areas with suburbs surrounding. But from driving throughout the state back and forth between Columbus and Cleveland I quickly learned that the representation and understanding that I had of Ohio was not representative of Ohio. Sprawled across Ohio between the major cities is amish country, forests, farms, acres of corn and soy fields, and sparse houses and business. These geographic differences do correlate with a different way of life. This is even evident in politics when looking at election maps in Ohio the more major cities usually tend to lean democratic and the surrounding areas in between more republican. Meaning that if someone wanted to study Ohio and only focused on the major cities they may conclude that Ohio is a very liberal state when in fact there is a lot of Ohio that has more a more conservative viewpoint that would just be ignored.If someone had wanted to study the society and culture of Ohio and they just focused on Cleveland and Columbus they would have a skewed idea of the characteristics of Ohio.
Now of course to understand the most important characteristics of a society it is still important to study the major cities. Societies developed around major cities, so a lot of characteristics of a society were originally based in the major cities. But ways of life evolve and characteristics change. It must be remembered that the major cities shouldn't be studied exclusively. It is important to look at a society at a whole understand the major cities and what drives people to and away from them. Compare the people who live in the major cities versus the less major cities what do they have in common what is different? It would be easier and less time consuming to just focus on the major cities but if one truly wants a representative view of a society its imperative that they study both major and non major cities alike.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...esentative from the society as a whole. If one thinks that the characteristics of ...
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Suggestion: a lot of (Ohio)
...ery liberal state when in fact there is a lot of Ohio that has more a more conservative viewp...
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Suggestion: If
...ve viewpoint that would just be ignored.If someone had wanted to study the society...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...ust be remembered that the major cities shouldnt be studied exclusively. It is important...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, may, so, still, then, as for, for example, in fact, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2478.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 524.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72900763359 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75665742516 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.408396946565 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 802.8 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.9297801619 60.3974514979 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9523809524 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61904761905 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.83258426966 310% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16136205359 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711570723583 0.0831039109588 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655825263676 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126144506327 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516549090496 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.