To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
More than three fourths of the population of most countries reside in the urban areas. Cities also provide education and employment for majority of the citizens of a society and hence, contribute massively to the GDP. Cities are truly the objects of wonder as they're formed by a congregation of people from various ethnicities and cultural backgrounds. They provide an experience so fulfilling and enthralling that one won't be blamed if one assesses the whole society just based on the study of its major cities. After all, what do see when you do a Google search of New York? Do you see all the magnificent high rise buildings or do you see the plethora of beautiful parks that surround it? I bet it's the former.
If you want to get an idea of the progress of a country, it is best to look at how its major cities are doing, since all the major technical advancements and innovations are centered around the cities. However, that is not all that a society comprises of. A society is made by each and every person living in it and that obviously includes those living in the countryside or rustic regions as well. Judging a place only from it's cities is doing a great injustice to it. In my opinion, both the factions of the society complement each other. If the cities provide education and employment, the villages are responsible for a majority of the food growth. If the cities offer a diverse living experience, the towns offer the traditions and practices that lead to the diversity in the first place. Therefore, a complete assessment of a society can be made only by considering both sides of the society.
I had the chance of interning in Hong Kong last year. Being in a technical field myself, I was naturally excited to spend my summers in a place known for its technical advancements and the tech-culture that it offers. Before leaving, I looked at all the famous places that I can visit and most of them were either architectural wonders or extremely tall sky-scrappers or exorbitant shopping malls. However when I got there, I was shocked to see the lush greenery and the undisturbed wildlife. I visited the neighboring islands that had no access to motor vehicles and where they still lived the old traditional life of fishermen. I got to know the mindset of the people living there and appreciated the difference in point of view that they had as compared to those living in the urban areas. I always used to wonder, how could people live without the leisures of internet or cable-TV. However, it was then that I realized that every person has his own notion of peace and those people had it in the austerity of living in the countryside.
My experiences in Hong Kong have made me realize that the towns and villages are as important parts of a society as the cities and to make a complete assessment of the society, the life in countryside should be studied as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 261, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
...ties are truly the objects of wonder as theyre formed by a congregation of people from...
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Line 1, column 699, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...beautiful parks that surround it? I bet its the former. If you want to get an ...
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Line 5, column 243, Rule ID: COMPRISES_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of
...However, that is not all that a society comprises of. A society is made by each and every pe...
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Line 9, column 399, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...scrappers or exorbitant shopping malls. However when I got there, I was shocked to see ...
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Line 9, column 794, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...red to those living in the urban areas. I always used to wonder, how could people...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, so, still, then, therefore, well, after all, in my opinion, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2388.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 511.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67318982387 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72841949883 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493150684932 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6424542493 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2916666667 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08333333333 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132594532605 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0344225449064 0.0831039109588 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413702427592 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.082875094346 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053908499749 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.